江苏省苏州市2025届高三期中考试读后续写深入分析与解读

江苏省苏州市2025届高三期中考试 读后续写 深入分析与解读（原卷版） 1、 续写原文 The line of customers snaked around the counter (柜台). There were just two more shopping days before Christmas, and most of the shoppers in line were in panic mode. One of those customers was my husband, Dale. Dale is one of those people who are the no-nonsense shoppers who depend on fast service because every minute counts as the countdown before Christmas continues. But the service here was anything but fast. The problem was the elderly lady at the front of the line, who kept talking happily to the salesgirl working at the cash register. “This sweater is for my granddaughter,” the lady explained. “She’s going to be a teacher, you know. And she’s doing very well. She has a very nice boyfriend who is an architectural technician. He’s just started a job with a good company, but you know, we haven’t seen any sign of a ring yet. Young people seem to wait so long these days. Why, I was married with one child and another one on the way when I was her age.” On and on she talked as she painstakingly counted out her change, unaware of the winding snake of customers behind her. When she finally zipped her purse shut and picked up her parcel, the clerk gestured to the man next in line. “Thank you, dearie.” She started to move slowly, checking the contents of her shopping bag. She was almost to the end of the counter when suddenly she turned back. “Oops! Excuse me, what’s this for?” she asked, holding up a piece of paper. “It’s a discount coupon (优惠券) that will give you 15 percent off your next purchase here at the store,” replied the salesgirl. “Well, thank you, my dear, but I won’t be needing this,” she beamed. “Here, you can use it right now!” she said, handing it to the man next in line. The man’s eyes widened, and he mumbled (嘟囔) a word of thanks as she walked to the door. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150词左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Then an amazing thing happened.________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ By the time the coupon reached Dale, he felt like he was part of something special.________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 二、语篇分析 （一）主题分析 故事的主题围绕“节日善意与共享”展开，强调了人与人之间的_____________。在圣诞购物的忙碌与压力中，一个看似微不足道的善举（老太太将优惠券传递给下一位顾客）唤起了周围人的善意与感动，形成了一种传递式的温暖体验，展现了节日氛围中的人性美好。 （2） 情节分析 1. 情节结构分析 情节分为以下几个阶段： 开端（铺垫）：___________________________________________________。 发展（冲突）：___________________________________________________。 转折（转机）：___________________________________________________。 高潮（高潮）：___________________________________________________。 结尾（余韵）：___________________________________________________。 2. 情节线索分析 故事的线索是老太太的善意行为（赠送优惠券），它引发了顾客之间的互动与情绪变化，成为整个情节的核心推动力。通过这条线索，作者展现了从焦虑到温暖的情感转变。 3. 情节安排技巧分析 对比：____________与____________形成鲜明对比，增强了冲突感和戏剧性。 悬念：随着老太太的行动，顾客如何反应成为读者的关注点，保持了叙事的吸引力。 情感递进：从最初的不耐烦，到接过优惠券时的惊讶，再到最后的温暖，情绪层层递进。 （三）人物分析 1. 主次人物分析 主角：____________ 她是情节发展的关键人物，通过自己的善意行为，触发了整个故事的核心事件。 次要角色：____________和____________ Dale 代表普通顾客的心态，经历了从焦躁到感动的变化；销售员则辅助推动情节发展。 2. 人物特点分析 老太太：____________。她的自言自语和慷慨体现了她的热情与真诚。 Dale：______________，反映了在快节奏生活中对时间效率的追求，但在经历了温暖的传递后，他的内心被触动。 销售员：____________，体现服务行业的专业性。 （四）环境分析 故事发生在____________前的商店中，这一特定的时间和地点增加了情节的节日氛围。圣诞节的背景使“分享与善意”这一主题更加突出，而繁忙的购物场景又增强了冲突的真实性，为善意行为的出现奠定了戏剧基础。 （五）表达技巧分析 1. 语言技巧分析 细节描写：对老太太的言谈举止（如“喋喋不休”和“慢慢数零钱”）的细致刻画，使人物形象更加鲜明。 对话：通过顾客、销售员、老太太的互动对话推进情节，增强真实感与代入感。 情绪描写：从顾客的焦躁到后来接过优惠券时的感动，情绪变化细腻而真实。 2. 语言特点分析 通俗易懂：采用日常生活的语言，使故事贴近读者的生活。 幽默与温情交织：老太太的絮絮叨叨带有轻松幽默的成分，而她的善意行为又充满温暖。 节奏感强：从缓慢的老太太动作到后来优惠券迅速传递的对比，节奏的变化提升了故事的趣味性和感染力。 三、续写构思 （一）两段情节构思 第一段情节：_____________________________________。优惠券在队伍中逐一传递，每位顾客都表示感谢并将其继续赠与下一位。起初，顾客们出于礼貌接受，随着传递的继续，大家逐渐意识到这是一次小而珍贵的“善意接力”。队伍中的焦躁氛围被温暖和笑声取代。 第二段情节：_____________________________________。他不仅感叹于队伍中的人情味，还在回忆起圣诞节的真正意义——分享与关爱。最终，他决定也将这份善意继续传递出去。 （二）首尾内容构思 续写首段开头：承接老太太的行为，用“amazing thing”点明故事的核心转折，具体描写顾客间的反应与互动。 续写尾段结尾：呼应 Dale 的情绪转变，用一句感悟式的表达总结“这不仅是一次购物，更是一次心灵的温暖旅程”。 四、具体情节构思 （一）第一段情节构思 描写老太太离开后，优惠券在顾客之间传递的具体情景： 第一个接过优惠券的男人虽有些愕然，但很快决定将其转交下一位； 每位顾客接过优惠券时短暂犹豫，但最终选择继续赠与； 队伍中逐渐有人笑出声来，打破了最初的紧张和冷漠氛围。 情感变化： _______________ → _______________ → _______________ → _______________ （二）第二段情节构思 描写 Dale 的内心独白： 他回忆自己最初的急躁心情，与此刻被传递到的善意形成对比； 他意识到圣诞节不仅是购物，更是分享和感恩的时刻。 Dale 的决定：他接过优惠券后，笑着将其递给身后的顾客，用一句幽默或感性的语言表达对这份“传递接力”的感动。 五、教师下水作文 Then an amazing thing happened. The man who received the coupon glanced at it, hesitated briefly, and then smiled as he turned to the woman behind him. “Here, you can use it.” The woman blinked in surprise but accepted it with a laugh. Soon, the coupon began a journey down the line. Each person who received it took a moment to consider, smiled knowingly, and passed it on. Whispers of amusement and chuckles rippled through the queue, melting away the tension that had earlier dominated the air. Strangers exchanged warm glances, and a few even started chatting. A sense of camaraderie emerged, transforming a stressful shopping experience into a shared celebration of kindness. By the time the coupon reached Dale, he felt like he was part of something special. His earlier impatience had vanished, replaced by a profound sense of connection with the people around him. He held the coupon for a moment, feeling the collective goodwill it carried, then turned to the young couple behind him. “Merry Christmas,” he said warmly, handing it over. They smiled and thanked him, their faces lighting up. As Dale moved forward in line, he realized this wasn’t just about a discount—it was a reminder of the magic of giving, even in the smallest ways. 六、官方参考范文 Then an amazing thing happened. The man used the coupon that the elderly lady had given him. When the clerk handed him another coupon for his next visit to the store, he promptly turned around and gave it to the woman in line behind him. After she had used that coupon and the clerk gave her another one, the woman then passed it back to the shopper behind her. Dale couldn’t believe that a simple gesture of kindness could spark such chain reaction. By the time the coupon reached Dale, he felt like he was part of something special. He had never experienced anything like it before, and he was grateful to be a part of it. Dale decided to pay it forward by giving the coupon to the person behind him. He had come in feeling stressed and frustrated, but he was leaving feeling happy and fulfilled. It wasn’t the physical gift itself, but the reminder that even in the midst of the holiday rush, people were still capable of kindness and generosity. （一）参考范文情节分析 1. 情节核心 这篇范文的情节围绕“优惠券的传递”展开，通过一个小小的善意行为（老太太赠送优惠券）引发一连串的善意接力。故事展示了一个简单举动如何在忙碌的节日氛围中唤起人们的温情和善意，最终传递至主人公 Dale，完成了情感的升华。 2. 情节结构 起因：_________________________________________________________________。 发展：_________________________________________________________________。 高潮：_________________________________________________________________。 结局：_________________________________________________________________。 3. 情节安排技巧 链式递进：故事围绕优惠券在顾客间传递的链式动作展开，推动情节发展。这种结构清晰明了，层层递进，强化了连锁反应的感染力。 转折与反差： Dale 从一开始的“焦虑和沮丧”到“感动和满足”的情感转变，凸显了善意行为的力量，也让情节更具感染力。 小事件反映大主题：一个简单的购物场景，通过善意传递的链条，映射了节日中的分享精神与人性温暖。 4. 情感递进 初始情绪：焦躁、疲惫（反映典型节日购物者的心理状态）。 中途转变：目睹优惠券传递后，从好奇到感动，逐渐融入情感中。 最终感悟：从简单的物质传递，领悟到节日的核心价值——分享与慷慨。 2、 重点语块 （一）语块积累 1. snake around the counter ___________________________ 2. in panic mode ___________________________ 3. no-nonsense shopper___________________________ 4. every minute counts ___________________________ 5. count out change___________________________ 6. pick up her parcel___________________________ 7. promptly turned around___________________________ 8. mumble a word of thanks ___________________________ （3） 语块造句 1. snake around the counter The line of customers snaked around the counter, and the store was bustling with activity as people waited patiently to buy last-minute Christmas gifts. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 2. in panic mode As the deadline approached, most of the team members were in panic mode, rushing to finalize the presentation before the meeting. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 3. no-nonsense shopper Being a no-nonsense shopper, she planned her purchases ahead and walked straight to the items she needed without browsing. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 4. every minute counts During the final days of the election campaign, every minute counts, so the candidates worked tirelessly to reach as many voters as possible. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 5. count out change The elderly woman carefully counted out her change at the register, making sure she had the exact amount before handing it over. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 6. pick up her parcel After completing the transaction, she picked up her parcel and smiled warmly at the sales assistant who had been so patient. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 7. promptly turned around When he realized he had dropped his wallet, he promptly turned around and retraced his steps to find it. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 8. mumble a word of thanks Embarrassed by the unexpected kindness of the stranger, he mumbled a word of thanks before hurrying away. 汉语意思：______________________________________________________________________ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$