读后续写：Max弹钢琴 课件-2024-2025学年高一上学期英语写作专项

Speaker: Lily Continuation Writing -- Max 参加钢琴比赛 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It is said that the best time of playing the piano is when he or she is a kid. But when Max came to his first piano lesson in his mother’s car, he was already 11 years old. I preferred students begin at an earlier age, but due to his insistence(坚持), I took him as a student. As much as Max tried, he lacked the sense of tone and basic rhythm. At the end of each lesson,he’d say, “My mom’s going to hear me play someday. ” But it seemed hopeless. I only knew his mother from a distance as she waited in her aged car, but never stepped in. After two months, one day Max didn’t come to our lessons any more. I thought about calling him but assumed, because of his lack of ability, that he had decided to quit. I also was glad that he stopped coming — he was a bad advertisement for my teaching! Later, in order to celebrate the New Year, I mailed to the students’ homes a letter on the upcoming concert. Surprisingly, Max received and asked me if he could be in the concert. I told him that the concert was not for dropouts(辍学者), but for current pupils. He said that his mom had been sick and unable to take him to piano lessons but he was still practicing. I didn’t know what led me to agree eventually. At the concert night, the hall was packed with parents and friends. I put up Max last in the program. I thought that any damage he would do would come at the end of the program and the negative effect would reduce to the least. Surprisingly, the concert went off successfully. Then Max came up on stage. His clothes were wrinkled and his hair looked messy. “Why didn’t his mother at least make him comb his hair for this special night? ” I thought. Para 1: Unexpectedly, Max chose Beethoven’s works. __________ Para 2: Immediately,I rushed to the stage, and held Max firmly with delight, asking “How did you do it? _______________________ Read for basic elements (5w&1h) When at the concert night Where concert hall Who (main characters) Max (11 years old; persistent in playing the piano) I (piano teacher, think Max a bad advertisement) Max’s mom (accompany him; silent; ill) What & Why Max persisted in his efforts to practice the piano and signed up for the concert program, even though he dropped out of school and didn’t perform well in my lessons. Unexpectedly, Max chose Beethoven’s works. Immediately,I rushed to the stage, and held Max firmly with delight, asking “How did you do it? 过渡句1：我对他的选择感到担忧。 根据第二段首句可推测出此段Max表演非常成功。主要情节写他的表演过程和观众反应。 过渡句2：Max结束表演。 Max的回答。根据文中Max的特点，主旨应与坚持有关。文中多次提到的母亲，Max刻苦练习也与母亲有关。所以本段重点应突出母爱的伟大和坚持的力量。 情节+ 细节+ 过渡词 第一段： 情节：Max的表演过程以及最终取得成功。 细节：“我”的心理变化——从担忧到开始惊讶、惊喜。 Max的动作描写：手指灵巧地在钢琴上滑动。 观众的反应：听时全场鸦雀无声，结束时掌声如潮。 高分表达 我的担忧被欣赏所取代。 My worries gave way to admiration. 他的手指在键盘上跳舞。 His fingers were dancing on the keyboard. 沉浸在美妙的音乐中 be (deeply) immersed in the beautiful music 观众爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。 The audience broke/burst into thunderous applause. 他一弹完最后一个音符，观众就爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。 No sooner had he finished the last note than the audience broke into thunderous applause 情节+ 细节+ 过渡词 第二段： Max回答“我”成功离不开母亲，他没有让母亲失望。 2. 点题句：爱与坚持可以使人排除万难，创造奇迹。 细节：Max回答时的神态或者动作描写（如眼眶红了 ，落泪，哽咽等） “我”听到Max回答后的反应（感动，落泪，拥抱等） 高分表达 悲伤 眼泪在眼中打滚 tears roll in the eyes 眼泪在眼中升起 tears well up in one’s eyes 眼眶发红 one’s eyes were red-rimmed. 他哽咽了，眼泪流过脸庞。 He choked, (with) tears streaming down his face. 拥抱 grab/hold sb. in one’s arms 创造奇迹 work wonders 参考范文 Para1: Astonished at his choice, I was quite worried as well. However, as he played, with his fingers dancing on the keyboard, my worries gave way to admiration. What a beautiful song had he played! I almost couldn’t believe it. Looking around, I saw that so deeply immersed was everyone in the melodious music that no other sound can be heard in the hall. But how could he managed to do this? I was wondering. Soon the performance was about to end. No sooner had he finished the last note than the audience broke into thunderous applause, with many people rising to their feet, cheering loudly for him. Para 2: Hearing my words, he smiled blandly. He told me that his mother was seriously sick. In the past few months, she always accompanied him in his practice. “I knew she loved Beethoven’s works, so I chose one of her favorites to practice. Hard as it was, her encouragement enabled me to keep practicing. Today, I didn’t let her down. ” He choked, with eyes red-rimmed. Touched by his words, I grabbed him tightly in my arms. And I understood that love and persistence could go beyond any limits and work wonders. 参考范文 THANKS 读后续写 $$