【春考特训课】第14讲：概要写作之记叙文、议论文简易速成技巧 -【决胜春季高考】2025年春季高考英语冲刺总复习（上海专用）

第14讲： 概要写作之记叙文、议论文简易速成技巧 知识梳理 演练 【考情链接】 概要写作，简言之就是对所读过的文章简要概括，写出文章的中心大意，也可称之为摘要。写概要时，是把文章的具体信息用一些具有概括功能的词和句表述出来，而不是抄袭文章的原句，更不是把细节性信息作为中心，而是要通过对文章中的单词、词组和句子进行合理转换，对文章的具体信息进行概括，再用合适的语言表述出来。这一题型主要考查学生对文章主旨大意的概括和准确获取关键词的能力，同时考查学生用简洁的语言概括文章重要信息的能力以及对文章整体结构的把握能力。因此，概要写作是基于阅读理解和书面表达，是二者的有机结合体，是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁。上海高考概要写作一般以说明文为主、议论文次之，，记叙文少有涉及。近年来实验研究报告类说明文是考查热点。 【要点梳理】 （一）记叙文概要写作技巧 记叙文(Narration)：找出时间(when),地点(where),什么人(who),做了什么事(what),为什么做(why),结果怎么样(how)六要素。其中,最重要的要点是某人(who)做了何事(what)。若是夹叙夹议的文章,还要加上作者的看法、观点、经验或感悟。  1.叙事性的记叙文(Narration)。  叙事性的记叙文的主要内容的概括主要抓住记叙文的几个要素：时间、地点、人物、事件和影响或后果。  2. 写人的记叙文（Description）。  写人的记叙文总结要点主要抓住人物的主要特点或事迹，划出关键词（所谓关键词是文中反复出现的体现主题或关联的词）。 （二）记叙文概要写作模板 记叙文体的阅读材料，相比其他文体而言，写概要相对容易。在写概要前，除明确文章主题外，还应抓住六个要素：when, where, who, what, why, how。在这六个要素中，所占内容比重最大的是what。一般来说，记叙文的故事概要可以用这样的模板来表示： 记叙文：what / who / when / where / why / how Who did what by…because… 当然，不是说每个故事概要都包含how或why，有时两者选其一即可。 （三）议论文概要写作技巧 议论文（Argumentation）：找出议论文的三要素，即论点、论据和结论。其关键是找出主题句或结论句。而这种文章的整体结构多数为总分结构、分总结构、平行结构等。因此，我们通常在首段或尾段，或者在各段的首句或尾句找论点。若文中有一分为二(即对立观点)的观点，两种观点都要概括，不要漏掉其中一方的观点。 （四）议论文概要写作模板 议论文：opinion / idea + argument (supporting ideas / reasons) 课堂精练 演练 · 记叙文概要写作样文展示 Directions: Read the following passage. Summarize the main idea and the main point(s) of the passage in no more than 60 words. Use your own words as far as possible.  Yesterday Matt was sick.I picked up Archie from the sitter and Eloise from school and decided to run to Target for a few things.I had hoped to be in and out quickly. I found a line with just one person ahead of me and began organizing my items on the conveyor.After placing my items，I looked up to see that the person ahead of me was an elderly woman. She was paying for her items with change and wanted to purchase each separately.I was frustrated with this woman and the inconvenience she had placed on me. But then I watched the young employee with this woman.I watched him help her count her change，ever so softly taking it from her shaking hands. When she asked if she had enough to buy a reusable bag，he told her she did and went two lines over to get one for her and then repackaged her items.Never once was this employee angry.He was nothing but patient and kind. As I was watching him，I saw that Eloise was too.She was standing next to the woman，watching the employee count the change.I realized I hadn’t been inconvenienced at all.That my daughter was instead witnessing kindness and patience and being taught this valuable lesson by a complete stranger. When the woman was finished，the employee began ringing up my items and thanked me for my patience.I then thanked him for teaching us patience and kindness by his treatment of that elderly woman.When he was finished I pushed my cart through the store trying to find the manager.I wanted her to know of the employee’s kindness and patience and how much it meant to me.After tracking her down and sharing the story with her，we left Target with a cart full of consumable items，but what is more，a heart full of gratitude for such an invaluable lesson. If you are ever in the Glendale Target，give Ishmael a smile and a nod.The world could use more people like him. 【写作指导】 要写好记叙文的概要，先要找到以下两个问题的答案：(1)谁做了什么？(2)结果如何？如果是夹叙夹议文，还要加上这个故事给人们的启示或教育意义。就该题而言，本文的概要应该包含：作者购物的时间、地点、结果以及从本次购物中得到的启示，最后用自己的语言串联起来。根据文本内容，这是一篇故事类的记叙文，要求对其进行概要写作。因此，我们先找出记叙文的六要素： · When—One day · Where—went to Target · Who— the writer with two children · What—for shopping; found an old lady was troublesome · How/Why—was touched by · Result— her children would learn a lot from this experience 列出了要点之后，我们就可以用自己的话将要点组织起来，概括成一段约60词的通顺概要： ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________- · 议论文概要写作样文展示 Directions: Read the following passage. Summarize the main idea and the main point(s) of the passage in no more than 60 words. Use your own words as far as possible.  The advantages of social networking Why do most people sign up to social networking sites? ①The main reason is to stay in touch with other people. These sites also help people to find their childhood friends that they have lost touch with. Renewing these long-lost friendships is just a click away. It is very exciting to be able to catch up with friends and keep up with their news on an almost daily basis thanks to frequent updates.② Keep up-to-date,however,doesn’t have to be restricted to friends and acquaintances(相识的人）.What many people tend to forget is that they can also use networking sites for professional reasons. It is actually a great way of finding out about upcoming job opportunities. Friends might know about job vacancies that may not be advertised elsewhere or they can even recommend their friends for certain jobs. Even people already employed can promote their business online. This is particularly important for artists, actors and musicians who can create pages devoted to their band or theatre company, and inform fans about their gigs(现场演唱会）or latest exhibitions. In addition, the sites can be used to allow the public to give instant feedback on the artists’ work and to interact with their favourite artist.③ Another great advantage of social networking sites is how easy it is to organize an event with your friends. Thanks to different settings people can organize their friends by different criteria(标准）. These criteria could be how close friends they are, common interests and hobbies or where they live. This means if a certain event takes place, for example, an open-air concert or a football match, all they have to do is invite the right group of friends to attend. Some networking sites offer a range of quizzes and games, so friends living on opposite sides of the globe can invite each other to participate and compete in a variety of games without leaving their homes.④ 【写作指导】 Step 1：细读全文，明确主题。 本文主要是社交网络的优点。 Step 2：划分要点。 本文分4个要点，已在文中标出。 Step 3：标主题句或关键词。 已在文中用横线标出每段主题句。 Step 4：概括。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________- 【实战演练】 Directions: Read the following passage. Summarize in no more than 60 words the main idea of the passage and how it is illustrated. Use your own words as far as possible. These days our society develops rapidly and forces people to rush. It appears that people have got used to being in a hurry. However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. The main reason that convinces us to oppose doing work in a hurry is the possibility of doing wrongs in a rush. When people do their jobs or take action in a hurry, they can’t make a sound decision and probably regret later. As the saying goes, “ Haste makes waste.” We should think carefully before making a decision and do our work less quickly. We should not make mistakes by doing work hurriedly. Slowing down the pace of life helps people enjoy their life better. For example, taking a train to some place certainly will take more time than taking a plane. However, taking a train makes people have enough time to get to know a lot of new friends. Besides, it allows people to fully enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way. On the contrary, being in a hurry will make us lose chances of enjoying our lives. Finally, slower life pace provides better health conditions for us. As is known to all, taking action in a hurry bothers people and raises their stress. People think if they are not in a hurry, they will become a loser and that annoys them. But being in a hurry can hurt people both physically and mentally. According to some studies, people who have a slower pace suffer fewer diseases, tend to be happier and live much longer than those whose life is tense, even if the former finish jobs more slowly than the latter. In short, working quickly will bring about more material benefits to make our society more advanced. Yet, much stress can’t bring enjoyment, friends and health, which are much more important than money and other material advantages. Therefore, take your time and live your life at a slower pace. 【写作指导】 1. 知体裁。这是一篇典型的议论文体裁，框架为“总分（总）” 即“论点(introduction of the topic)论据(body by reasoning)结论(conclusion by restating ,summarizing or suggesting)”， 通过“转折词”找文章“论点”。 议论文的主题句通常在首段或尾段，或者在各段的首句 或尾句。 These days our society develops rapidly and forces people to rush. It appears that people have got used to being in a hurry. However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. 2. 明论证。根据文章的discourse marker“话语标记词” 如”however,therefore”在文中划出各段“主题句”。 1)However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. 2)The main reason（ that convinces us to oppose doing work in a hurry ）is the possibility of doing wrongs in a rush. 3)Slowing down the pace of life helps people enjoy their life better. --On the contrary, being in a hurry will make us lose chances of enjoying our lives. 4)Finally, slower life pace provides better health conditions for us. 5)Therefore, take your time and live your life at a slower pace. 3. 找论据。完全用“自己简洁的语言”准确转述每一个要点（避免重复），可以用“词性变化或同义词/反义词替换”来转述。 1.）However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. ① To live life at a slower pace is better than to live life in a hurry/rush. ② （Under the stress of fast-paced life,） it is more beneficial to live a slower life . 2)The main reason（ that convinces us to oppose doing work in a hurry ）is the possibility of doing wrongs in a rush. ① The main reason is that doing things hurriedly will raise/increase the possibility of making mistakes. ② People are more likely to make mistakes when doing things in a hurry. ③ It may be easier for people to make mistakes when in a hurry. ④ Doing work hurriedly may easily lead to mistakes. 3)Slowing down the pace of life helps people enjoy their life better. --On the contrary, being in a hurry will make us lose chances of enjoying our lives. ① Slower life pace can make people’s life more enjoyable. ② Live their life at a slower pace can bring more enjoyment to life. 4)Finally, slower life pace provides better health conditions for us. ① Slowing down the pace of life can keep people healthier. ② Live their life at a slower pace helps people keep fit. ③ Slower life pace is beneficial to/is of benefit to/does good to people’s health. 合并： ① Slowing down the pace of life will not only give people more chances to enjoy life , but (also) offer them better health conditions. ② Not only does the slower life give people enjoyment but also it’s beneficial to their health. ③ Living life at a slower pace ensures a healthier and more enjoyable life. 5)Therefore, take your time and live your life at a slower pace. ① Thus, slow down your life pace. ② Thus, be slow and enjoy your life. ③ Thus, enjoy a slower life pace. ④ Thus, let’s slow down for a healthier and happier life. 4. 巧连贯。有效使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑连贯。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________- 课后反馈 演练 （2024年嘉定区二模） England Prohibits Phones in Schools, But Will It Help? Recently, England’s Department of Education has confirmed plans to ban the use of mobile phones in English schools during the school day, including break times. The guidance offers schools a variety of ways to implement (实施) the ban, ranging from an order to leave all phones at home, to handing them in on arrival or keeping them in inaccessible lockers. England’s response to the growing frustration with students’ cellphone use during school time is not unfounded. The United Nations this past summer published a report issuing a strong warning regarding technology use in schools around the globe. Some countries had already implemented strict “no-cellphone” policies. For example, France prohibited students in elementary and middle schools from using cellphones while on campus. Meanwhile, it is reported that most teens use their phones for an average of 43 minutes during school hours, with some students reaching six hours on the high end. These addictive devices often lead to distraction and social anxiety. Worse still, almost one-third of secondary school teachers said that their lessons were interrupted by students’ mobile phones. However, some people don’t believe that banning mobile phones in England’s schools will fundamentally address the harm that mobile phones do to children. “We work with children daily. We understand that a phone is a device to pay for a bus, contact your mum, and find information,” Kidron, a secondary school teacher, said. “So the device is not the issue; it is the persistent irresponsible content provided by online tech platforms that is to blame. Companies that engage with children, therefore, should offer content that is suitable for their age and development capacity.” Ghey, a concerned mother, also raised her voice on this matter, but with a different perspective. She argued for the phone manufacturers to make specific products for under-18s that prevent them from accessing harmful content. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【2024学年向明中学9月学科检测高三年级英语试卷】 Buy Experiences, not Possessions Over the past several years, researchers have conducted scientific studies suggesting experiential purchases (such as travel, and outdoor activities) tend to bring people more happiness than material ones (for instance, clothing, and electronic goods). Recently, they have investigated another downstream consequence. They conducted a series of 13 experiments, asking people to think about either experiential or material purchases and then rate feelings on nine-point scales. In some studies, people reported feeling more ties with someone who had made the same experiential purchase than someone with the same material purchase. Owning the same T-shirt or sneakers as someone else is an interesting coincidence, but hiking the same trail or seeing the same performance makes people feel more connected. This reflects the fact that experiential purchases are more central to an individual’s identity because this kind of consumption tends to represent more of one’s true, essential sense of self. These findings apply even when people think about how their experiences differ. Researchers asked participants to consider a situation in which they met someone who had made a similar experiential or material purchase, but the other person’s purchase was “upgraded”. Even in these cases, experiences were more likely to foster connection between people than material items were. Knowing that another person has a better version of what you have can create a sense of social distance. What researchers observe, however, is that this distance feels less wide when it comes to experiential purchases. Although unpleasant social comparisons can be commonplace in terms of possessions, it may be easier to find common ground and connect with someone else over similar experiences. Researchers also discovered experiential consumption fosters a sense of social connectedness more broadly. People who reflected on experiences they had acquired—rather than material goods—reported a broader sense of connection to humanity. They were more likely to express a greater desire to engage in social activities than they do after they reflect on an important possession. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2018年6月高考 Becoming an attractive employee The 2008 financial crisis created an unstable job market. Fast-forward to the present, and the economy has not fully recovered. Thus, it’s of vital importance for job seekers to carefully strategize their approach to job application. And it is especially important for those new to the workforce. They should look at making themselves as attractive as possible to employers. For young people, information technology skills will play an increasing role in the future As the generation to have grown up in the Information Age, they are quite confident when it comes to showing off their interests and skills in this field. This makes them a natural fit for companies seeking expertise in technology, marketing, and networking. They should emphasize these skills when applying for jobs that require the ability to multitask. Another attractive quality is experience. It is important that an applicant’s resume list any activities that involved teamwork and goal-driven responsibilities. Membership in a sports or social club and participation as a volunteer are good examples of this. These activities involve goal management and planning, along with the ability to focus while competing on a team. When hiring committees see this, they see a candidate who is capable of working in a variety of environments. Finally, an attractive quality when job-hunting is a great attitude toward a potential job. Young job seekers are known to be overconfident because they have been praised for everything they have done. But they must realize that the employment market is about how an employee will be a good fit for a company, not the other way around. In fact, in an interview, an important question to ask is: “What would be expected of me as an employee?” In today’s tough job market. young job seekers need to provide a potential employer with good reasons to hire them. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！第 1 页 共 1 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 第14讲： 概要写作之记叙文、议论文简易速成技巧 知识梳理 演练 【考情链接】 概要写作，简言之就是对所读过的文章简要概括，写出文章的中心大意，也可称之为摘要。写概要时，是把文章的具体信息用一些具有概括功能的词和句表述出来，而不是抄袭文章的原句，更不是把细节性信息作为中心，而是要通过对文章中的单词、词组和句子进行合理转换，对文章的具体信息进行概括，再用合适的语言表述出来。这一题型主要考查学生对文章主旨大意的概括和准确获取关键词的能力，同时考查学生用简洁的语言概括文章重要信息的能力以及对文章整体结构的把握能力。因此，概要写作是基于阅读理解和书面表达，是二者的有机结合体，是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁。上海高考概要写作一般以说明文为主、议论文次之，，记叙文少有涉及。近年来实验研究报告类说明文是考查热点。 【要点梳理】 （一）记叙文概要写作技巧 记叙文(Narration)：找出时间(when),地点(where),什么人(who),做了什么事(what),为什么做(why),结果怎么样(how)六要素。其中,最重要的要点是某人(who)做了何事(what)。若是夹叙夹议的文章,还要加上作者的看法、观点、经验或感悟。  1.叙事性的记叙文(Narration)。  叙事性的记叙文的主要内容的概括主要抓住记叙文的几个要素：时间、地点、人物、事件和影响或后果。  2. 写人的记叙文（Description）。  写人的记叙文总结要点主要抓住人物的主要特点或事迹，划出关键词（所谓关键词是文中反复出现的体现主题或关联的词）。 （二）记叙文概要写作模板 记叙文体的阅读材料，相比其他文体而言，写概要相对容易。在写概要前，除明确文章主题外，还应抓住六个要素：when, where, who, what, why, how。在这六个要素中，所占内容比重最大的是what。一般来说，记叙文的故事概要可以用这样的模板来表示： 记叙文：what / who / when / where / why / how Who did what by…because… 当然，不是说每个故事概要都包含how或why，有时两者选其一即可。 （三）议论文概要写作技巧 议论文（Argumentation）：找出议论文的三要素，即论点、论据和结论。其关键是找出主题句或结论句。而这种文章的整体结构多数为总分结构、分总结构、平行结构等。因此，我们通常在首段或尾段，或者在各段的首句或尾句找论点。若文中有一分为二(即对立观点)的观点，两种观点都要概括，不要漏掉其中一方的观点。 （四）议论文概要写作模板 议论文：opinion / idea + argument (supporting ideas / reasons) 课堂精练 演练 · 记叙文概要写作样文展示 Directions: Read the following passage. Summarize the main idea and the main point(s) of the passage in no more than 60 words. Use your own words as far as possible.  Yesterday Matt was sick.I picked up Archie from the sitter and Eloise from school and decided to run to Target for a few things.I had hoped to be in and out quickly. I found a line with just one person ahead of me and began organizing my items on the conveyor.After placing my items，I looked up to see that the person ahead of me was an elderly woman. She was paying for her items with change and wanted to purchase each separately.I was frustrated with this woman and the inconvenience she had placed on me. But then I watched the young employee with this woman.I watched him help her count her change，ever so softly taking it from her shaking hands. When she asked if she had enough to buy a reusable bag，he told her she did and went two lines over to get one for her and then repackaged her items.Never once was this employee angry.He was nothing but patient and kind. As I was watching him，I saw that Eloise was too.She was standing next to the woman，watching the employee count the change.I realized I hadn’t been inconvenienced at all.That my daughter was instead witnessing kindness and patience and being taught this valuable lesson by a complete stranger. When the woman was finished，the employee began ringing up my items and thanked me for my patience.I then thanked him for teaching us patience and kindness by his treatment of that elderly woman.When he was finished I pushed my cart through the store trying to find the manager.I wanted her to know of the employee’s kindness and patience and how much it meant to me.After tracking her down and sharing the story with her，we left Target with a cart full of consumable items，but what is more，a heart full of gratitude for such an invaluable lesson. If you are ever in the Glendale Target，give Ishmael a smile and a nod.The world could use more people like him. 【写作指导】 要写好记叙文的概要，先要找到以下两个问题的答案：(1)谁做了什么？(2)结果如何？如果是夹叙夹议文，还要加上这个故事给人们的启示或教育意义。就该题而言，本文的概要应该包含：作者购物的时间、地点、结果以及从本次购物中得到的启示，最后用自己的语言串联起来。根据文本内容，这是一篇故事类的记叙文，要求对其进行概要写作。因此，我们先找出记叙文的六要素： · When—One day · Where—went to Target · Who— the writer with two children · What—for shopping; found an old lady was troublesome · How/Why—was touched by · Result— her children would learn a lot from this experience 列出了要点之后，我们就可以用自己的话将要点组织起来，概括成一段约60词的通顺概要： 【参考范文】 The passage tells us an experience of shopping.(要点1)One day，the author with two children went to Target for shopping.(要点2)While waiting in line, she found an old lady was troublesome, but the young employee treated her patiently.(要点3)Seeing that, the author was touched by his kindness and patience and she thought her children would learn a lot from this experience.(要点4) · 议论文概要写作样文展示 Directions: Read the following passage. Summarize the main idea and the main point(s) of the passage in no more than 60 words. Use your own words as far as possible.  The advantages of social networking Why do most people sign up to social networking sites? ①The main reason is to stay in touch with other people. These sites also help people to find their childhood friends that they have lost touch with. Renewing these long-lost friendships is just a click away. It is very exciting to be able to catch up with friends and keep up with their news on an almost daily basis thanks to frequent updates.② Keep up-to-date,however,doesn’t have to be restricted to friends and acquaintances(相识的人）.What many people tend to forget is that they can also use networking sites for professional reasons. It is actually a great way of finding out about upcoming job opportunities. Friends might know about job vacancies that may not be advertised elsewhere or they can even recommend their friends for certain jobs. Even people already employed can promote their business online. This is particularly important for artists, actors and musicians who can create pages devoted to their band or theatre company, and inform fans about their gigs(现场演唱会）or latest exhibitions. In addition, the sites can be used to allow the public to give instant feedback on the artists’ work and to interact with their favourite artist.③ Another great advantage of social networking sites is how easy it is to organize an event with your friends. Thanks to different settings people can organize their friends by different criteria(标准）. These criteria could be how close friends they are, common interests and hobbies or where they live. This means if a certain event takes place, for example, an open-air concert or a football match, all they have to do is invite the right group of friends to attend. Some networking sites offer a range of quizzes and games, so friends living on opposite sides of the globe can invite each other to participate and compete in a variety of games without leaving their homes.④ 【写作指导】 Step 1：细读全文，明确主题。 本文主要是社交网络的优点。 Step 2：划分要点。 本文分4个要点，已在文中标出。 Step 3：标主题句或关键词。 已在文中用横线标出每段主题句。 Step 4：概括。 【参考范文】 Social networking sites benefit people in several different ways. Not only do they allow people to keep in close touch with friends old or new, but they provide potential job opportunities and encourage online business promotion plus interaction. Moreover, they facilitate the organization of various events, connecting people with similar hobbies or preferences globally.(54words) 【实战演练】 Directions: Read the following passage. Summarize in no more than 60 words the main idea of the passage and how it is illustrated. Use your own words as far as possible. These days our society develops rapidly and forces people to rush. It appears that people have got used to being in a hurry. However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. The main reason that convinces us to oppose doing work in a hurry is the possibility of doing wrongs in a rush. When people do their jobs or take action in a hurry, they can’t make a sound decision and probably regret later. As the saying goes, “ Haste makes waste.” We should think carefully before making a decision and do our work less quickly. We should not make mistakes by doing work hurriedly. Slowing down the pace of life helps people enjoy their life better. For example, taking a train to some place certainly will take more time than taking a plane. However, taking a train makes people have enough time to get to know a lot of new friends. Besides, it allows people to fully enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way. On the contrary, being in a hurry will make us lose chances of enjoying our lives. Finally, slower life pace provides better health conditions for us. As is known to all, taking action in a hurry bothers people and raises their stress. People think if they are not in a hurry, they will become a loser and that annoys them. But being in a hurry can hurt people both physically and mentally. According to some studies, people who have a slower pace suffer fewer diseases, tend to be happier and live much longer than those whose life is tense, even if the former finish jobs more slowly than the latter. In short, working quickly will bring about more material benefits to make our society more advanced. Yet, much stress can’t bring enjoyment, friends and health, which are much more important than money and other material advantages. Therefore, take your time and live your life at a slower pace. 【写作指导】 1. 知体裁。这是一篇典型的议论文体裁，框架为“总分（总）” 即“论点(introduction of the topic)论据(body by reasoning)结论(conclusion by restating ,summarizing or suggesting)”， 通过“转折词”找文章“论点”。 议论文的主题句通常在首段或尾段，或者在各段的首句 或尾句。 These days our society develops rapidly and forces people to rush. It appears that people have got used to being in a hurry. However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. 2. 明论证。根据文章的discourse marker“话语标记词” 如”however,therefore”在文中划出各段“主题句”。 1)However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. 2)The main reason（ that convinces us to oppose doing work in a hurry ）is the possibility of doing wrongs in a rush. 3)Slowing down the pace of life helps people enjoy their life better. --On the contrary, being in a hurry will make us lose chances of enjoying our lives. 4)Finally, slower life pace provides better health conditions for us. 5)Therefore, take your time and live your life at a slower pace. 3. 找论据。完全用“自己简洁的语言”准确转述每一个要点（避免重复），可以用“词性变化或同义词/反义词替换”来转述。 1.）However, it’s better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done. ① To live life at a slower pace is better than to live life in a hurry/rush. ② （Under the stress of fast-paced life,） it is more beneficial to live a slower life . 2)The main reason（ that convinces us to oppose doing work in a hurry ）is the possibility of doing wrongs in a rush. ① The main reason is that doing things hurriedly will raise/increase the possibility of making mistakes. ② People are more likely to make mistakes when doing things in a hurry. ③ It may be easier for people to make mistakes when in a hurry. ④ Doing work hurriedly may easily lead to mistakes. 3)Slowing down the pace of life helps people enjoy their life better. --On the contrary, being in a hurry will make us lose chances of enjoying our lives. ① Slower life pace can make people’s life more enjoyable. ② Live their life at a slower pace can bring more enjoyment to life. 4)Finally, slower life pace provides better health conditions for us. ① Slowing down the pace of life can keep people healthier. ② Live their life at a slower pace helps people keep fit. ③ Slower life pace is beneficial to/is of benefit to/does good to people’s health. 合并： ① Slowing down the pace of life will not only give people more chances to enjoy life , but (also) offer them better health conditions. ② Not only does the slower life give people enjoyment but also it’s beneficial to their health. ③ Living life at a slower pace ensures a healthier and more enjoyable life. 5)Therefore, take your time and live your life at a slower pace. ① Thus, slow down your life pace. ② Thus, be slow and enjoy your life. ③ Thus, enjoy a slower life pace. ④ Thus, let’s slow down for a healthier and happier life. 4. 巧连贯。有效使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑连贯。 【参考范文1】 To live life at a slower pace is better than to live life in a hurry. Firstly,people are more likely to make mistakes when doing things in a hurry.Secondly,slower life pace can bring more enjoyment to life.Lastly, it is beneficial to people’s health.So ,be slow and enjoy life. 【参考范文2】 To live life at a slower pace is better than to live life in a hurry.The main reason is that doing things hurriedly will raise the possibility of making mistakes while slowing down the life pace can not only make people’s life more enjoyable but also keep people healthier.Thus, let’s slow down for a healthier and happier life. 课后反馈 演练 （2024年嘉定区二模） England Prohibits Phones in Schools, But Will It Help? Recently, England’s Department of Education has confirmed plans to ban the use of mobile phones in English schools during the school day, including break times. The guidance offers schools a variety of ways to implement (实施) the ban, ranging from an order to leave all phones at home, to handing them in on arrival or keeping them in inaccessible lockers. England’s response to the growing frustration with students’ cellphone use during school time is not unfounded. The United Nations this past summer published a report issuing a strong warning regarding technology use in schools around the globe. Some countries had already implemented strict “no-cellphone” policies. For example, France prohibited students in elementary and middle schools from using cellphones while on campus. Meanwhile, it is reported that most teens use their phones for an average of 43 minutes during school hours, with some students reaching six hours on the high end. These addictive devices often lead to distraction and social anxiety. Worse still, almost one-third of secondary school teachers said that their lessons were interrupted by students’ mobile phones. However, some people don’t believe that banning mobile phones in England’s schools will fundamentally address the harm that mobile phones do to children. “We work with children daily. We understand that a phone is a device to pay for a bus, contact your mum, and find information,” Kidron, a secondary school teacher, said. “So the device is not the issue; it is the persistent irresponsible content provided by online tech platforms that is to blame. Companies that engage with children, therefore, should offer content that is suitable for their age and development capacity.” Ghey, a concerned mother, also raised her voice on this matter, but with a different perspective. She argued for the phone manufacturers to make specific products for under-18s that prevent them from accessing harmful content. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】England has decided to ban mobile phone use in schools. The ban is necessary since it is a trend worldwide and the overuse of phones causes mental problems in teens and disturbs teachers’ lessons. However, some argue the real issue is the irresponsible content from tech platforms and ask phone makers to produce phones tailored to minors. (57 words) 【解析】 【导语】本文的体裁是议论文。文章讨论了英格兰教育部确认计划在校园内禁止学生在上课时间内使用手机的措施，包括课间休息时间。文中提到了不同学校执行禁令的方式，例如要求学生将手机留在家中，或者到校后上交手机，或者将手机锁在无法接触的储物柜中。 【详解】1 要点摘录 ①Recently, England’s Department of Education has confirmed plans to ban the use of mobile phones in English schools during the school day. ②England’s response to the growing frustration with students’ cellphone use during school time is not unfounded. ③These addictive devices often lead to distraction and social anxiety. Worse still, almost one-third of secondary school teachers said that their lessons were interrupted by students’ mobile phones. ④However, some people don’t believe that banning mobile phones in England’s schools will fundamentally address the harm that mobile phones do to children. She argued for the phone manufacturers to make specific products for under-18s that prevent them from accessing harmful content. 2.缜密构思 将第1、4两个要点进行重组，将第2、3两个要点进行整合。 3.遣词造句 England has decided to ban mobile phone use in schools, which is necessary since it is a trend worldwide and the overuse of phones causes mental problems in teens and disturbs teachers’ lessons. However, some argue that the real issue is the irresponsible content from tech platforms and ask phone makers to produce phones tailored to minors. 【点睛】[高分句型1] England has decided to ban mobile phone use in schools.使用了动词不定式作宾语。 [高分句型2]：The ban is necessary since it is a trend worldwide and the overuse of phones causes mental problems in teens and disturbs teachers’ lessons. 使用了since连接的原因状语从句。 【2024学年向明中学9月学科检测高三年级英语试卷】 Buy Experiences, not Possessions Over the past several years, researchers have conducted scientific studies suggesting experiential purchases (such as travel, and outdoor activities) tend to bring people more happiness than material ones (for instance, clothing, and electronic goods). Recently, they have investigated another downstream consequence. They conducted a series of 13 experiments, asking people to think about either experiential or material purchases and then rate feelings on nine-point scales. In some studies, people reported feeling more ties with someone who had made the same experiential purchase than someone with the same material purchase. Owning the same T-shirt or sneakers as someone else is an interesting coincidence, but hiking the same trail or seeing the same performance makes people feel more connected. This reflects the fact that experiential purchases are more central to an individual’s identity because this kind of consumption tends to represent more of one’s true, essential sense of self. These findings apply even when people think about how their experiences differ. Researchers asked participants to consider a situation in which they met someone who had made a similar experiential or material purchase, but the other person’s purchase was “upgraded”. Even in these cases, experiences were more likely to foster connection between people than material items were. Knowing that another person has a better version of what you have can create a sense of social distance. What researchers observe, however, is that this distance feels less wide when it comes to experiential purchases. Although unpleasant social comparisons can be commonplace in terms of possessions, it may be easier to find common ground and connect with someone else over similar experiences. Researchers also discovered experiential consumption fosters a sense of social connectedness more broadly. People who reflected on experiences they had acquired—rather than material goods—reported a broader sense of connection to humanity. They were more likely to express a greater desire to engage in social activities than they do after they reflect on an important possession. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Experiential purchases tend to bring people more happiness than material ones, which can be shown by the downstream consequence. People feel more ties with someone having the same experiential purchase even when their experiences differ, because the consumption tends to represent more of one’s true, essential sense of self. Also, experiential consumption fosters a sense of social connectedness more broadly. 【解析】 【导语】这是一篇议论文。文章主要讲述了经历性购买往往比物质性购买给人们带来更多的幸福可以通过下游后果来证明。即使人们的在经历时有所差别，人们也会觉得与拥有相同体验消费的人有更多的联系。此外，经历式消费更广泛地培养了一种社会联系感。 【详解】要点摘录 ①Over the past several years, researchers have conducted scientific studies suggesting experiential purchases (such as travel, and outdoor activities) tend to bring people more happiness than material ones (for instance, clothing, and electronic goods). Recently, they have investigated another downstream consequence. ②In some studies, people reported feeling more ties with someone who had made the same experiential purchase than someone with the same material purchase. ③This reflects the fact that experiential purchases are more central to an individual’s identity because this kind of consumption tends to represent more of one’s true, essential sense of self. ④These findings apply even when people think about how their experiences differ. ⑤Researchers also discovered experiential consumption fosters a sense of social connectedness more broadly. 2.缜密构思 将第①要点进行重组，将第②③④三个要点进行整合，将第⑤要点进行重组。 3.遣词造句 ①Experiential purchases tend to bring people more happiness than material ones, which can be shown by the downstream consequence. ②People feel more ties with someone having the same experiential purchase even when their experiences differ, because the consumption tends to represent more of one’s true, essential sense of self. ③Also, experiential consumption fosters a sense of social connectedness more broadly. 【点睛】[高分句型1] Experiential purchases tend to bring people more happiness than material ones, which can be shown by the downstream consequence.（运用一个复杂的主从复合句对原文第一段进行了概括，点明文章主要论点。其中which引导非限制性定语从句，从句中使用被动语态结构等表达高级）。 [高分句型2]：People feel more ties with someone having the same experiential purchase even when their experiences differ, because the consumption tends to represent more of one’s true, essential sense of self.（运用一个复杂的主从复合句对原文第二段，第三段，第四段进行了高度概括，总结论据合理。其中when引导时间状语从句，because引导原因状语从句，以及现在分词作后置定语等表达非常高级。 ） 2018年6月高考 Becoming an attractive employee The 2008 financial crisis created an unstable job market. Fast-forward to the present, and the economy has not fully recovered. Thus, it’s of vital importance for job seekers to carefully strategize their approach to job application. And it is especially important for those new to the workforce. They should look at making themselves as attractive as possible to employers. For young people, information technology skills will play an increasing role in the future As the generation to have grown up in the Information Age, they are quite confident when it comes to showing off their interests and skills in this field. This makes them a natural fit for companies seeking expertise in technology, marketing, and networking. They should emphasize these skills when applying for jobs that require the ability to multitask. Another attractive quality is experience. It is important that an applicant’s resume list any activities that involved teamwork and goal-driven responsibilities. Membership in a sports or social club and participation as a volunteer are good examples of this. These activities involve goal management and planning, along with the ability to focus while competing on a team. When hiring committees see this, they see a candidate who is capable of working in a variety of environments. Finally, an attractive quality when job-hunting is a great attitude toward a potential job. Young job seekers are known to be overconfident because they have been praised for everything they have done. But they must realize that the employment market is about how an employee will be a good fit for a company, not the other way around. In fact, in an interview, an important question to ask is: “What would be expected of me as an employee?” In today’s tough job market. young job seekers need to provide a potential employer with good reasons to hire them. 71.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考答案: How can young people attract their future employers? First, they need to demonstrate their knowledge and skills in information technology. Second, they should include in their resume the experiences that reflect they are cooperative and goal-oriented. Finally they need to adopt a proper attitude, that is, taking future employers’ expectations into consideration. Due to financial crisis, young people should appear fully attractive to attach to employers. Firstly, information technology skills are preferred in multitask because of its increasing importance. Besides, experience involving teamwork and valuable personal qualities is also of great value. Finally, employees should express their genunie hopes to show a great attitude to the job. All above contributes to hiring.(9分) Since the economy is not good at all, it's essential for employees to become attractive. First, information technology skills are more nature for the young and important to get a job. Second, experience with group operation that needs management and variety is also important. Third, becoming humble and having a right attitude is also the employers are looking for.(8分) Because of the financial crisis, the job seekers should be more attractive to apply for jobs. People should pay more attention to show their skillful expertise and their various experience working with others or their memberships. What’s more, keeping humble is important when you are in an interview. With this ideas, job seeker will get their ideal jobs.(6分) After the financial crisis, being an attractive employee is important. Different skills in modern fields can make employers more easily find their job and show themselves. Rich working experience can help you survive in tough working surroundings well. And not being so confident is also very important for finding jobs.(不到6分) 【分析】本文是一篇说明文。本文主要介绍了年轻人如何吸引他们未来的雇主。首先，他们需要展示自己在信息技术方面的知识和技能。第二，他们应该在简历中包含反映他们合作精神和目标导向的经历。最后，他们需要采取正确的态度，也就是考虑未来雇主的期望。 【详解】1. 要点摘录 ① …it’s of vital importance for job seekers to carefully strategize their approach to job application. ② For young people, information technology skills will play an increasing role in the future. ③ They should emphasize these skills when applying for jobs that require the ability to multitask. ④ Another attractive quality is experience. It is important that an applicant's resume list any activities that involved teamwork and goal-driven responsibilities. ⑤ Finally, an attractive quality when job-hunting is a great attitude toward a potential job. ⑥ In fact, in an interview, an important question to ask is: "What would be expected of me as an employee?" 2.缜密构思 将第2、3两个要点进行重组，将第5、6两个要点进行整合。 3.遣词造句 They need to demonstrate their knowledge and skills in information technology. They should include in their resumes the experiences that reflect they are cooperative and goal-oriented. 【点睛】[高分句型1] They should include in their resumes the experiences that reflect they are cooperative and goal-oriented.该句运用了定语从句和宾语从句对要点4进行了重组，使句子结构复杂高级； [高分句型2] they need to adopt a proper attitude, that is, taking future employers’ expectations into consideration.该句用“that is, …”引出了同位关系，对要点5和6进行了整合，表意清晰，言简意赅。 A 在包含主题句及涵盖三个要点的基础上，能根据文章准确阐述三个要点中任意两点 B 在包含主题句及涵盖三个要点的基础上，能根据文章准确阐述三个要点中任意两点 (1) They need to demonstrate their knowledge and skills in information technology. (2) They should include in their resumes the experiences that reflect they are cooperative and goal-oriented. (3) They need to adopt a proper attitude, that is, taking future employers’ expectations into consideration. C 必须包含主题句及涵盖三个要点（可以不展开） 主题句需表达的意思：How can young people attract their future employers? 或 How do young job seekers strategize the approach to job application? 三个要点：information technology skills， experience, attitudes D 1.只提到三个要点，但没有主题句 2.有主题句，但三个要点只提到两个 E 1.只提到一个或两个要点，但没有主题句 2.有主题句，但三个要点只提到一个 1. 如字数超6个（一行）以内（包括6个），在得分基础上扣1分，如字数超过6个以上得分基础上扣2分。 2. 如果有一处和一处以上连续5个单词与原文相同。在得分基础上扣1分。 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！第 1 页 共 1 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$