读后续写--奶奶的激励：我在游泳赛场上的蜕变 讲义-山东省滕州市2023～2024学年高一下学期期中考试英语试卷

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I had been swimming competitively for five years but after such a long time, I was ready to quit. I was often the only African American at the swimming competitions and our team couldn’t afford good uniforms. However, my number-one reason for wanting to quit was that I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions (荣誉奖)”. Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a bookshelf full of “Honorable Mentions”, which you get just because you showed up. One summer’s day, the day before a big swim meeting, I decided to tell my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I told her, she looked me in the eye and said, “Baby, remember these words ‘Quitters never win and winners never quit.’ Your grandmother didn’t raise losers or quitters. You go to that meeting tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear?” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, ma’am.” The next day we arrived at the swim meeting late, missing my group of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I should be allowed to swim with the older group. I knew she expected me to take part. As I mounted the board, all the other girls looked at me. I quickly noticed that these girls were all here to do just one thing — beat me. All of a sudden, my grandma’s words rang in my head, “Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine.” “Yes, Grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours,” I said to myself. 续写要求： 1．续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The match began! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文章大意 “我” 参加游泳比赛已经五年了，由于自己是比赛中唯一的非裔美国人、团队制服差以及总是获得 “荣誉奖” 等原因，“我” 打算退出。在一次大型游泳比赛前向奶奶表明想法，奶奶却严厉地告诉 “我”“放弃者永不成功，成功者永不放弃”，让 “我” 继续参赛。比赛当天我们迟到了，教练让 “我” 和年龄更大的一组比赛，在比赛前 “我” 受到其他选手的注视，但奶奶的话在脑海中响起激励了 “我”。 伏笔与续写回应 1. 伏笔：奶奶的话 “Quitters never win and winners never quit.” 续写中 “我” 在比赛时用奶奶的话激励自己，使自己坚持下来并在最后获得胜利，回应了伏笔，体现了奶奶的话对 “我” 的深刻影响。 2. 伏笔：教练坚持让 “我” 参加年龄更大组的比赛。续写中可通过描述比赛的艰难，侧面体现教练对 “我” 能力的信任，而 “我” 也没有辜负教练的期望。 续写要点 第一段 · 情感线：坚定、全力以赴。“我” 带着奶奶的鼓励，在比赛中坚定信念，拼尽全力，忘却疲惫和周围的压力。 · 故事线：描述 “我” 在比赛中的状态，如奋力划水、蹬腿，克服身体的疲劳，一心向前，与其他选手竞争。 · 续写示范：The match began! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. Every stroke was filled with determination. I felt the water rush past me as I pushed myself forward with all my strength. The other swimmers seemed to fade away as I focused solely on the finish line. My muscles screamed in protest, but grandma's words kept echoing in my mind, fueling my every move. 第二段 · 情感线：惊喜、自豪、感动。听到周围的掌声和欢呼声，“我” 从专注的比赛状态中脱离出来，意识到自己胜利后的惊喜，为自己感到自豪，同时也为奶奶的鼓励而感动。 · 故事线：讲述 “我” 听到欢呼声后的反应，看到教练和队友的表现，意识到自己赢得比赛，回忆起奶奶的话语，决定继续游泳。 · 续写示范：It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. I looked around in surprise and saw the excited faces of the spectators. My coach was beaming with pride. I realized I had won. At that moment, a sense of pride and joy filled my heart. I knew I couldn't have done it without grandma's words. I was determined to keep swimming, to be a winner. 情感线 1. 从打算退出时的沮丧、无奈，到奶奶劝说后的犹豫，再到比赛中的坚定，最后获胜后的惊喜、自豪与感动，情感丰富且层层递进，使读者能深刻感受到 “我” 内心的变化。 2. 情感变化推动了故事发展，让读者更关注 “我” 在比赛中的表现和最终的决定。 故事线 1. 故事围绕 “我” 是否退出游泳队展开，从产生退意，到奶奶劝说，再到比赛过程和获胜结果，情节完整、逻辑清晰。 2. 每个环节都紧密相连，突出了坚持和家人鼓励对成功的重要性这一主题。 主旨升华句 1. "In the pool of life, it's the words of our loved ones that keep us afloat during the toughest races."（在生活的泳池中，在最艰难的比赛中，是我们所爱之人的话语让我们保持前行。） 2. "Grandma's wisdom became my lifebuoy, teaching me that quitting is never an option when chasing dreams."（奶奶的智慧成了我的救生圈，教会我在追逐梦想时，放弃永远不是一个选项。） 3. "The race is not just in the water; it's a battle within ourselves, and the right motivation can make us champions."（比赛不只是在水中，它是我们内心的一场战斗，正确的激励能让我们成为冠军。） 4. "With grandma's encouragement as my paddle, I learned that perseverance can turn the tide in any competition."（以奶奶的鼓励为我的桨，我懂得了在任何比赛中坚持都可以扭转局势。） 5. "In the swim of life, never let the waves of difficulty wash away your will to win, for the echoes of love can be your strongest current."（在生活的游泳中，永远不要让困难的浪潮冲走你获胜的意志，因为爱的回声可以成为你最强大的水流。） 两篇写作示范 范文一 The match began! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. I dived into the water like a fish desperate for survival. My strokes were powerful and rhythmic. I could sense the competitors beside me, but I didn't care. I was swimming for my grandma. The pain in my body was nothing compared to the fire in my heart. I kept pushing myself, going faster and faster. It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. I lifted my head as I reached the end of the pool. I saw the astonished looks of the other swimmers. My coach was running towards me with open arms. I felt an overwhelming sense of achievement. I knew from then on that I would never be a quitter, because I had grandma's love and her inspiring words. 范文二 The match began! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. I was like a torpedo shooting through the water. The water resistance felt like nothing as I swam with fierce determination. I thought of all the times I had considered quitting and how grandma's words had changed my perspective. I was determined to prove myself. I sped up, ignoring the tiredness in my limbs. It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. I emerged from the water, gasping for breath. The crowd's excitement was contagious. I saw my teammates' proud smiles. In that moment, I understood the value of perseverance. I was so grateful for grandma's encouragement. I would continue to swim and face every challenge with the spirit of a winner. 参考答案 The match began!I swam harder than I had ever swum before. After the first turn, I was surprised to find that I had a half-body length lead over other girls. However, they soon sped up and narrowed the gap. Halfway through the race, the girl to my left almost drew level with me, while I already began to feel tired. At that moment, the powerful words of my grandma echoed again in my ears, “Quitters never win and winners never quit.” I waved my arms and legs to keep swimming and used every last bit of strength to swim the last 50 meters. As soon as I touched the wall, I looked the screen, waiting anxiously for the result. It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. I saw my time in the screen but could hardly believe it - mine was at the top of the list! My coach ran to me and hugged me tightly when I got out of the water. Narrow victory as it was, I did win my first real trophy that day. Everything felt like a dream as I stood on the winner's podium, weeping tears of joy. Back at home, I delightedly replaced the “Honorable Mention” on my shelf with the new trophy. “Yes, grandma, you’re right. Quitters never win and winners never quit.” 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$