Unit 5 Off to space 第4课时Writing课件2024-2025学年牛津深圳版英语七年级上册

nullUnit 5 Off to space A post about a dream trip to space 写作优质课 （沪教2024版）七年级 上 Learning objectives 1 Lead in Pre-writing 3 While-writing Post-writing 5 Summary Assessment 7 Homework 2 4 6 8 1 Learning objectives 1. Understand the writing purpose, style, and requirements. 2. Master the structure of making a travel plan. 3. Improve the structure, content, and language of the initial draft through self-evaluation and peer evaluation. After learning this lesson, you can: www.21cnjy.com China's space dream 2 Lead in Do you know the history and the development of China’s space dream? www.21cnjy.com Thousands of years ago, there was a Chinese story about Chang’e flying to the Moon. During the Ming Dynasty, the Chinese made the first rocket. 2 Lead in www.21cnjy.com On 15 October 2003, Yang Liwei went into space in the Shenzhou V spaceship. On 24 April 1970, China sent its first satellite into space. 2 Lead in www.21cnjy.com China launched(发射)the Shenzhou XII spaceship on June 17 2021, sending 3 astronauts to its permanent space station (永久的空间站) . 2 Lead in www.21cnjy.com If you have a chance to visit space, how will you plan your trip? 2 Lead in www.21cnjy.com Thinking about where you want to go (e.g. the Moon, Mars). Step one: Plan 3 Pre-writing David the Moon Mars the space hotel the space station I would like to go to the space station. www.21cnjy.com 3 Pre-writing David drew a mind map before writing. Let’s match the topic with each paragraph. d c b a www.21cnjy.com Add more details to make the introduction more specific. Step two: Discuss and make sentences 4 Writing Introduction When Where With whom One day the space station With my family Add details. How will you get there? How long will it take to get there? ... www.21cnjy.com Things I will have to do there tie my sleeping bag to the wall wash in a different way Write complete sentences. We will have to tie our sleeping bags to the wall. We will have to wash our hands in a different way. Step two: Discuss and make sentences 4 Writing www.21cnjy.com Things I will have to do there 4 Writing Discuss more things. learn how to float safely check and fix our spaceship avoid pollution eat space food do exercise every day communicate with the Earth take oxygen tank www.21cnjy.com Things I am going to do there look at the Earth from space do some experiments go on a space walk Write complete sentences. I am going to do some experiments. I am going to look at the Earth from space. I am going to go on a spacewalk. Step two: Discuss and make sentences 4 Writing www.21cnjy.com 4 Writing Things I am going to do there Discuss more things. look at stars take photos of the Milky Way build new stations explore other planets look for signs of life launch satellites encourage space travel teach live lessons from space www.21cnjy.com What the trip will be like: amazing It will be an amazing experience. Write complete sentences. Step two: Discuss and make sentences 4 Writing special interesting wonderful fantastic great enjoyable exciting happy www.21cnjy.com Tip 1 Think of a top sentence for each part Introduction Thins I will have to do there Thins I am going to do there What the trip will be like This is what my dream trip looks like. Things are very different in space. When we arrive at the space station, I will first do... I really look forward to travelling into space someday. Step three: Write an article 4 Writing www.21cnjy.com Tip 2 Detailed description 让文章更加饱满 We will have to tie our sleeping bags to the wall. There is much less gravity, so we will have to tie our sleeping bags to the wall when we sleep. cause and effect Adverbial of time Step three: Write an article 4 Writing www.21cnjy.com We will have to wash our hands and brush our teeth in a different way. Tip 2 Detailed description 让文章更加饱满 We will have to wash our hands in a different way. Add more details or example and use conjunctions to join them, such as because, so, but, and so on. Step three: Write an article 4 Writing www.21cnjy.com Step three: Write an article 4 Writing I finished my writing. www.21cnjy.com Pay attention to the logic between different parts. Remember to add: a concluding sentence supporting sentences Topic sentences 4 Writing I hope I can travel into space with my family one day. This is what my dream trip looks like. First, my family and I will fly out into space on a spaceship. When we get into orbit, we will visit a space station. It will take us about six hours to get there. Things are very different in space. There is much less gravity, so we will have to tie our sleeping bags to the wall when we sleep. We will also have to wash our hands and brush our teeth in a different way. When we arrive at the space station, I will first look out of the windows and enjoy the view of the Earth. After that, I would like to do some experiments. I really want to study how plants grow in space. Next, I’m going to put on a spacesuit and go on a spacewalk. I really look forward to travelling into space someday—it will be an amazing experience! necessary linking words www.21cnjy.com 4 Writing Write your article with this layout. Step four: Write your post Introduction Things I will have to do Things I am going to do What the trip will be like www.21cnjy.com 5 Post-writing Visiting the Moon I hope I can visit the Moon with my family one day. This is what my dream trip looks like. First, my family and I will fly to the Moon on a spaceship. The Moon is around 380,000 kilometres from the Earth, so it’ll take us about three days to get there. Things are different in space. There are a few things I’ll need to do there. There is much less gravity, so everything floats, including us! We’ll need to learn how to float safely. It’s like being a superhero who can fly, but with practice to master the art of ‘space walking’. Because there is no air on the Moon, we must take oxygen tanks with us. Even though we’re far away, we can still talk to our friends and scientists on Earth. We use radios and satellites to send messages back and forth. It’s important to make them know our findings and any challenges we face. Sometimes, we share beautiful pictures of Earth from space! www.21cnjy.com 5 Post-writing When we arrive at the space station, I will take a walk on the Moon and take as many photos as I can. After that, We can help build new stations. Space stations are like homes for astronauts. It’s meaningful to do so. Next, I am going to teach live lessons from space, to share my experiences and knowledge with students around the world. I really look forward to it now. The trip to the Moon is sure to be an unforgettable experience! I can’t wait to embark on this incredible journey! www.21cnjy.com Step Five: Check and revise Tick () the boxes to check your writing, and then revise it. ✓ ✓ ✓ ✓ 5 Post-writing www.21cnjy.com Elements Level Content内容(6分) 要点齐全，切合题意 适当发挥 Accuracy准确性(6分) 语法，大小写，拼写等格式错误 语言使用恰当，丰富 Fluency流畅性(3分) 分段，书写，衔接，过渡 互评总分 5 Post-writing Step Six: Grade and share www.21cnjy.com How to write a dream trip? A dream trip to space Beginning Ending ( First...After that...Next... ) I think it’ll be a wonderful/ an amazing experience in my life. when/how/with whom Things I will have to do there Things I am going to do there Body Detailed plan---pay attention to the linking words 6 Summary www.21cnjy.com 7 Assessment Self-assessment Marks I can write a post about a dream trip to space based on the given outline framework. 1 2 3 4 5 I can describe the things I will have to do and the things I am going to do in space. 1 2 3 4 5 I can use the simple future tense correctly to write my dream trip. 1 2 3 4 5 www.21cnjy.com 8 Homework Finish the exercise on Page 63 of Book B. Suppose you want to become an astronaut in the future. In group, draw a mind map about how to achieve this. Complete your online post about your plan to become an astronaut using the mind map you have drawn. My plan to become an astronaut Study hard Be healthy and strong .... ... ... www.21cnjy.com Thanks! 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