Unit 10 单元写作指导与演练-【同步写作课】2024-2025学年八年级英语上册单元写作深度指导（人教版）

Unit 10 If you go to the party, you'll have a great time? 单元写作指导与演练 【单元话题解读】 本单元写作情境属于“人与自我”主题范畴中“做人与做事”这一主题群,涉及子主题“问题和解决方式”。常见的写作任务为描述自己在学业、人际交往中的一些烦恼以及生活中出现的一些问题,并针对这些烦恼和问题征求建议,或针对他人的烦恼和问题提出建议，体裁多为书信等应用文。写此类作文时，首先我们应该掌握常用的提建议的句型；在此基础上，根据情景，明确提建议的方法；再根据所提供的信息展开合理的发挥，使作文意思完整。 【写作目标】 本单元话题为“做决定”, 并针对学习生活中产生的问题, 提出可行性建议。现如今，学生有很多关于学习和朋友方面的烦恼。他们能做些什么呢，下面是我的一些建议。首先，问题和烦恼在生活中很常见。和人谈论烦恼会有帮助。找到你信任的一个人，和他说一说，说出来，你就会觉得好很多。第二，你可以尽力做一些事情去放松一下，让自己开心。例如，可以跟妈妈去购物，或者看你最喜欢的电影。第三，可以把它们写下来，它会帮助你把烦恼从大脑里赶出去。总而言之，如果我们不逃避这些问题，我们就能找到最好的方式去解决他们. 写作技巧、 “⑴ 那么首先要审题，确定时态为一般现在时，人称为第一人称，开头要开篇点题，征求建议时要明确阐明自己面临的问题及自己的困惑。 ⑵ 正文要介绍遇到了什么烦恼和问题。 ⑶ 结尾要给人真诚、亲切的感觉，建议要中肯、有针对性；并希望得到帮助与回复。陈述+分析+建议”三步法写“问题建议类”作文 ◆ 第一步: 陈述问题。用简单的语言概述一下对方遇到的困扰, 对对方的苦恼表示理解。 ◆ 第二步: 分析问题。针对所提出的问题进行分析。 ◆ 第三步: 提出建议。呼应开头, 重申观点, 并表达美好的祝愿。 【单元素材积累】 【词汇积累】 Give advice 短语积累 备考 prepare for an exam/ get ready for an exam  数学有难度  have problems with Math  玩的开心   have a good time  给某人建议  give sb advice/ give advice to sb; give sb suggestions/ give suggestions to sb   最好的方式去做某事  the best way to do sth   对...有帮助   be helpful to sth   做某事是正常的 It's normal to do sth  尽某人最大努力  try one's best to do sth  担心某事  be worried about sth 很难过听到某事   I'm sorry to hear that ... 是个好主意去做某事  It's a good idea to do sth 擅长做某事  be good at doing sth/ do well in doing sth 句型积累 常用写作句型 1. I’m sorry to hear that… 2. It’s normal to have problems in… 3. It’s best not to run away from your problems. 4. Unless we talk to someone, we’ll certainly feel worse. 5. Sharing a problem is like cutting it in half. 6. I think you should… 7. You are halfway to solving the problem by doing… 8. I hope you can get out of trouble soon. ◆开头句 ①In my eyes,you are fully wrong this time,because… ②Since I was a little child,my parents are strict with my study so that I can get better grades than others. ③What worries me most is that I can't get on well with my parents,because… Give advice 参考句子 ▶️I am sorry to hear that you have problems with your parents. 听说你和你的父母出现了问题，我很难过。 ▶️It's normal to feel worried before exams.  考前感到焦虑是很正常的。 ▶️We often have a lot of problems and worries in our daily life.  我们日常生活中总是有很多的问题和焦虑。 ▶️I am sorry to hear that you are in trouble now.  听说你现在有麻烦，我很难过。 ▶️In fact, I want to tell you that many students have the same problem. 事实上，我想告诉你，许多学生都有同样的问题。 ▶️ I am sorry to hear that you are feeling sorry and sad because you lost the basketball game.     听说你篮球比赛失利你很伤心，我也很难过。 ▶️ I am sorry to hear that you are not feeling well these days. 听说你这几天身体不舒服，我很难过。 ▶️ Here is some advice. 这有一些建议。 ◆中间句 ①You'd better say sorry to her first and tell her the reason why you didn't accept the invitation. ②I kept talking to my parents and sometimes they were really understanding. ③There is a saying that sharing a problem is like cutting it in half. ▶️You should call your best friend and talk with him or her. 你应该打给你的朋友和他们聊一聊。 ▶️You should let your parents know your feelings.   你应该让你的父母知道你的感受 ▶️  The first step is to …  第一步是去…… ▶️You'd better get on well with your classmates and friends.你要跟你的同学和朋友相处得好。 ▶️ It's a good idea to have a talk with your parents. 跟你的父母谈一谈是个好办法。 ▶️  I think the best way to solve the problems is to share them with others.  我认为解决问题的最好办法就是跟其他人分享。 ◆结尾句 ①There is no doubt that understanding each other helps to develop good friendship. ②Always keep in mind that you're halfway to solving a problem just by talking to someone. ▶️ Good luck to you./Wish you good luck. 祝你好运！ ▶️ I hope what I said can help you. 我希望我所说的能帮到你。 ▶️ I hope problems can be solved soon.  我希望你问题很快得到解决。 ▶️ You are sure to get better soon.   你肯定很快就会好起来的。 ▶️ In a word, if we don't run away from the problems, we can find the best way to solve them.      总的来说，如果我们不逃避问题，我可以找到最好的方式解决他们。 ▶️ All in all, it's easy to get along well with your parents as long as you try your best.      总之，只要你尽力跟你父母相处好就是简单的。 ▶️ Hope everything goes well with you. 希望万事顺利。 ▶️ In a word, nothing is possible if we put our heart into it. I hope what I said is helpful to you.      总之，如果你全身心投入，没有什么是不可能的。我希望我说的对你有帮助。 ▶️ I hope my advice can work well with you.   我希望我的建议能奏效。 【名言积累】 ①Two heads are better than one.三个臭皮匠,顶个诸葛亮。 ②To help others is to help yourself.帮助别人就是帮助你自己。 【连词】 first, second, third, Finally, as long as, so...that..., Although, though, because, so, all in all，both...and..., both of, however, but, or, then, that's why/ one of the main reasons, too...to..., what's more, in addition, in my opinion, as for me, in my eye 【实例讲解1】 【写作任务】（Section B 3c） 假如你是李华，你校英语报“大家来帮忙”栏目收到一位叫Grace的同学的来信，信中她诉说了自己的两个烦恼：1. 刷短视频上瘾；2. 总是熬夜，导致上课犯困。你作为该报实习小编辑，请你写一篇英语短文，帮助她解决烦恼。 【审清题目】 内容：针对他人的烦恼提出建议。  文体：应用文。 时态：以一般现在时为主。 人称：介绍对方的烦恼及给对方建议时用第二人称；介绍自己的观点时用第一人称。 【头脑风暴】 针对他人的烦恼提出建议 描述烦恼 分析烦恼可能会带来的后果 分析烦恼原因 针对烦恼给出建议 【提供素材】 ◆常用短语 在横线上填写短语。 Problems Consequences Reasons Advice be addicted to (对……上瘾) watching short videos have problems with your schoolwork, get short-sighted (近视的), have dry eyes ... lack self-control (缺乏自制力), not use time wisely (明智地) ... (1)______________(去图书馆) more often, set your screen time limits (设定……限制), take part in more outdoor activities ... always stay up be in low spirits (没精打采) / feel tired the next day, (2)______________(对你的健康有害) ... get into bad habits, play games, watch short videos ... give up your bad habits, read before bedtime, (3)______________(制订计划) for your studies and hobbies ... feel nervous (紧张的) before an exam (4)______________(犯错), do poorly in the exam ... (5)______________(担心) the exam results, be afraid of letting ... down, be not well-prepared ... get enough sleep, (6)______________(听令人放松的音乐), fully prepare for your exam ... Key: 1. go to the library  2. be bad for your health  3. make plans  4. make a mistake / mistakes  5. worry / be worried about  6. listen to relaxing music ◆常用句型 • I'd like to give ... some advice. • I think / advise that ... should ... • Why not ...? • It's better for you to ... • It's important / necessary to ... 【谋篇布局】 将括号内的汉语翻译成英语，补全短文。 ◆称呼 Hi, Grace, ◆引出话题 I've learned about your two problems, and I really want to help you. I'd like to give you some advice. ◆描述第一个烦恼+烦恼带来的后果+分析原因并给出建议 Your first problem is that you are addicted to watching short videos. I think (1)_____________________________(人们通过观看它们来放松是很正常的). But it's not good to be addicted to it. If you don't give up the bad habit, you may end up getting short-sighted or having dry eyes. (2)_____________________________(首先找出问题的原因很必要). You may lack self-control, so why not set your screen time limits for yourself ? (3)_____________________ ________(如果你只是想通过看短视频交朋友), I think it's better for you to take part in outdoor activities to make friends. ◆描述第二个烦恼+烦恼带来的后果+分析原因并给出建议 Your second problem is that you always stay up. As a result, (4)_____________________________(你可能第二天感觉到累). First, if you stay up because you like to watch short videos, then solving the first problem is the key to solving the second one. Second, (5)_____________________________(如果你熬夜是为了完成你的作业), I think you should do your homework as soon as you get home. If you stay up to play games, I advise that you should read before bedtime, because reading can make you relaxed and help you sleep better. ◆表达祝愿 I hope my advice would be helpful to you. ◆结尾 Yours, Li Hua Key: 1. it's normal for people to relax by watching them 2. It's necessary to find out the reasons for the problem at first 3. If you just want to make friends through watching short videos 4. you may feel tired the next day 5. if you stay up to finish your homework 【实例讲解2】 英语课上，老师让同桌之间讨论各自的烦恼，并就对方的烦恼提出建议。假如你的同桌Sam有两个烦恼：一是因为写作业睡得晚，导致他每天都觉得很累；二是马上要考试了，他感到很紧张。请你根据Sam的烦恼写一篇短文，给出解决办法，在下节口语课上展示。 ●【审清题目】内容：针对他人的烦恼提出建议文体：说明文时态：以一般现在时为主人称：以第三人称为主●【头脑风暴】 ●【提供素材】◆短语&句子 根据汉语提示，写出对应的英文表达。 ●【谋篇布局】 将括号内的汉语翻译成英语，补全短文。Key: 1. He doesn't do his homework first after school  2. he will be able to go to bed early / he can go to bed early3. He doesn't think he will get good grades  4. These are all good ways to help relax ◆句型• I'd like to give ... some advice.• I think he / she should ...• If he / she ..., he / she will ...• If he / she takes / follows my advice, he / she will ...• Why not ...?• He / She'd better ...• It's better for him / her to ... Key: 1. don't stay up late  2. Make a plan for studies and hobbies 3. Read in a right way  4. Do / Take exercise / Do / Play sports every day 写作练笔 假如你叫李华,你的网友在邮件里提到最近她和好友之间产生了矛盾,她不知道自己是否做错了什么,接下来该怎么做。请你写一封不少于80词的英文邮件,给她一些建议并谈谈你对“友谊”的看法。 Dear Li Hua,     How's everything going?I'm so worried and I want to get your help. Last Friday my best friend Judy asked me to see a movie with her after school. I told her I wasn't  interested in the movie and refused her. Actually,I wanted to prepare for a speech competition（演讲比赛） on the weekend. As a result,she was angry with me and didn't talk to me anymore.     What should I do?I'm looking forward to your ideas. Thanks a lot.      Yours, Lily ►►审题指导 1.文体：应用文 2.人称：以第二人称为主 3.时态：一般现在时和一般将来时 4.写作要点：明确写作要点,所给的要点要全,并加入自主发挥的部分。 ►►思路点拨 Dear Lily, I'm sorry to hear about your trouble.. .I think friends should ①be honest with each other. So ②it's wrong of you not to tell the truth to your friend. I ③advise you to talk with your friend seriously.④You'd better say sorry to her first and tell her ⑤the reason why you didn't accept the invitation. ⑥If you tell her your reason for not going to the movies,I'm sure she will be ⑦understanding.Right now the speech contest seems more important than the movies,so it is important for you to keep ⑧working hard on it. Finally,⑨there is no doubt that understanding each other helps to develop good friendship. Just sit down and have a talk,and you will get her back. I hope these suggestions can help you. Yours, Li Hu 点评: ①be honest with，②it's wrong of sb.to do sth.，④had better和⑧work hard on的使用让文章的句式表达更加丰富多样。 ⑤the reason why引导的定语从句和⑨there is no doubt that引导的同位语从句的使用让文章的表达更高级。 本篇范文语言丰富，句式多样,同时能够灵活运用本单元所学单词和语法，如 advise,understanding和if引导的条件状语从句等。 【小试身手】 某中学做了“成长的烦恼（growing pains）”的问卷调查,调查显示多数学生面临的问题（problems）和苦恼（worries）如下： 1.父母很严格； 2.与父母、老师关系紧张（难以沟通）； 3.担心学习成绩； 4.睡眠时间不足等。 请根据上面的提示,写一篇80词左右的文章,谈谈你目前面临的问题是什么,你如何看待这些问题并打算如何解决。题目和开头已给出,不计入总词数。 How to Deal with Growing Pains As a teenager,I have to face some growing pains. What worries me most is that I can't get on well with my parents,because they are very strict with me. They care so much about my study and grades that I was always afraid to take exams. If I sometimes made careless mistakes,they will be angry. Sometimes I even have difficulty sleeping well. There is a saying that sharing a problem is like cutting it in half. For me,when facing problems,talking to my parents helps a lot. Though my parents are not experts,they have more experience,and they can understand my stress now and help me to relax. Always keep in mind that you're halfway to solving a problem just by talking to someone. 【真题解析】 1．父母是我们最亲的人，但我们有时候会在与父母沟通时遇到困难。请以“How to communicate with our parents”为题，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈与父母沟通的技巧和做法。要求：词数80词左右。 How to communicate with our parents ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: How to communicate with our parents As we grow up, we find that it’s not easy to communicate with our parents sometimes. So what should we do when communicating with them? Here are some of my ideas. Firstly, we can make a list of things our parents and we disagree about most. Try to find out the reason why we have different ideas. Accept each other’s idea little by little. If we still have different ideas, we’d better not get angry. Secondly, we should talk with them more. Sharing ideas can make us closer. Besides, we should also learn how to really listen. Listening is a necessary skill in our life. In the end, be sure to polite. We are a family. 【详解】 1、题干解读：题目要求以“How to communicate with our parents”为题写一篇文章，谈谈与父母沟通的技巧和做法，可适当发挥。 2、写作指导：本文应该以第一人称来叙述内容；时态采用一般现在时为主；介绍怎样和父母沟通时，应详细具体，语句通顺，逻辑性强，保证条理清晰。 2．某中学生英文报正开辟专栏讨论中学生如何减压。假如你叫Mary，请根据以下提示写出你的具体做法，向该专栏投稿。80词左右。 提示：1. 与他人交流；2. 参加体育运动；3. 参加娱乐活动；4. 其他减压方式。 参考词汇：stressed adj. 有压力的 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: Dear editor, There are many ways for us high school students to relax ourselves. As for me, when I feel stressed, I usually communicate with friends or teachers. Sometimes I do sports with my classmates. I go to the movies or listen to light music in my spare time, too. What’s more, going on a trip is another way to make me relaxed. I believe. if we are more relaxed, we’ll live more happily and learn better. Yours, Mary 【详解】 1.题干解读：这是一篇材料作文，讨论中学生如何减压，根据提示，向该专栏投稿。 2.写作指导：本文用第一人称来介绍；时态采用一般现在时态为主，写作时注意用上所提示的内容：1. 与他人交流；2. 参加体育运动；3. 参加娱乐活动；4. 其他减压方式。本文思路清晰，语言表达准确，用词恰当，意思通俗易懂。 3．假如你叫Tom，你的朋友John在学习上、生活方面遇到一些问题和困扰，他很焦虑。请根据以下内容提示给他写一封电子邮件，给他一些建议帮助他克服焦虑。 提示：1.每个人都会有苦恼、焦虑的时候；2.要找人诉说你的烦恼；3.遇到困难可以和同学们，老师，家长交流。4.可适当发挥内容。80词左右。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 Dear John, It’s normal for everyone to have problems and worries. But I think talking to someone helps a lot. Firstly, if you have problems with schoolwork or life, you should talk to your classmates, teachers or parents. Sharing a problem is like cutting it in half. So you are halfway to solving a problem just by talking to someone about it! Secondly, listening to music or taking part in outdoor activities is another way to help you get relaxed. Last, it’s best to smile at yourself and never keep problems to yourself. Please remember you are not alone. I believe we can overcome them in the end. Yours, Tom 【详解】 1.题干解读：本文是写一篇电子邮件；假如你叫Tom，你的朋友John在学习上、生活方面遇到一些问题和困扰。根据题干提示给他写一封电子邮件，给他一些建议帮助他克服焦虑。 2.写作指导：本文采用一般现在时，以第二人称为主；文章第一段告诉对方，每个人都会遇到困难；第二段详细叙述如何解决困难和困扰；最后一段鼓励对方，最后总会克服这些困难。保证叙述完整，条理清晰；注意电子邮件格式。 4．假如你是Laura，你的好朋友Tina对于将要到来的考试感到很担忧，担心不能取得好成绩。请你给她写一封信，针对她的问题，提出你的建议，并给她一些安慰和鼓励。 要求：1. 语句通顺，符合逻辑，可适当发挥； 2. 70词左右。开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 参考词汇：worried about, helpful, first of all, if, will, nervous, believe in oneself Dear Tina, I’m sorry to hear that you are worried about the coming exam. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Just believe in yourself and try your best. I always believe you’re the best! Yours, Laura 【答案】例文： Dear Tina, I’m sorry to hear that you are worried about the coming exam. Here is my advice. I hope it’s helpful to you. First of all, the exam results don’t mean everything. It’s good to care about the result, but if you worry too much about it, you will not be able to enjoy your study. Next, if you are too nervous, you’d better do something to relax. Don’t spend your time worrying about the exams all the time. Just believe in yourself and try your best. I always believe you’re the best! Yours, Laura 【详解】 1.题干解读：该题目属于应用文写作，在写作时按照信的格式来写，并且根据题目要求，针对Tina对于将要到来的考试感到担忧的问题，提出你的建议，并给她一些安慰和鼓励。 2.写作指导：本文应该用第一和第三人称为主来叙述内容；时态采用一般现在时和一般将来时。在叙述内容时，力求语言通顺，内容完整，保证条理清晰，符合逻辑。 5．阅读下面Jim写给他的朋友Lily的信，根据这封信的内容给Jim写一封回信。 Dear Lily, I have a problem, I need your help. I always thought I was popular at school. But I just found that my friends planned a birthday party for my best friend. No one invited me and I don’t know why. I’m very upset and don’t know what to do. Can you help me? Yours, Jim ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文： Dear Jim, It’s normal for us to have a problem in life. You needn’t be worried. I think you should talk about it with your best friend. They might forget to invite you. If they know that, they will invite you to the party. If they invite you, you should go to the party, if you go to the party, you should take a gift. I hope you can follow my advice. Yours, Lily 【详解】 1.题干解读：该题目属于书信写作，给Jim写一封回信，写作时要按书信格式写。在写作时首先认真阅读Jim的书信，根据Jim遇到的问题，进行有针对的书写。 2.写作指导：本文会用到多种人称，但是以第二人称为主；时态采用一般现在时为主，由于是给Jim的建议，可能会用到表示建议的句型，例如，You should…/You had better…等；内容要根据Jim的来信书写。叙述要完整，注意表达的顺序，逻辑关系，叙述要保证条理清晰，写完以后，要注意检查，确保语法、单词拼写和标点使用正确。 6．假如你是Karen，父母在学习上对你很严格，除了学习你很少有时间做自己喜欢的事。为此你很苦恼，请你给英文电台《知心姐姐》栏目组写一封信，讲述自己的苦恼并寻求她的帮助。 要求：1. 语句通顺，符合逻辑，可适当发挥； 2. 70词左右。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文： Dear Sister Known, I don’t know how to deal with my problems. My parents are very strict with my study. They hope that I can have a good grade. So I have to study after school. After finishing my homework, my parents will ask me to read books. I feel very tired and upset. But if I tell them that I don’t want to study every day, they will be angry with me. What should I do? Can you give me some advice? Yours, Karen 【详解】 1.题干解读：该题目属于应用文写作，在写作时按照信的格式来写，并且根据题目要求，Karen讲述自己的苦恼并寻求《知心姐姐》栏目的帮助。 2.写作指导：本文应该用第一和第三人称来叙述内容，时态采用一般现在时和一般将来时。在叙述内容时，力求语句通顺，符合逻辑，保证条理清晰，行文连贯。 7．假如你是Teenager杂志的主编，你叫Dr. Lee最近你收到你的读者Rick的来信，向你倾诉他的苦恼，他因太过肥胖被同学们嘲笑。请你给他一些合理建议帮助他摆脱烦恼。80词左右。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: Dear Rick, I’ve heard from you and I feel sorry about it. I totally understand how you feel when  someone laugh at you. Here is my advice. Firstly, There is no need to care about what others think of you. The most important thing is to be yourself. Secondly, try to eat healthily-keep away from high-fat food and eat more fruit and vegetables. It can help you lose weight. Thirdly, I advise you to play sports often. You should get up early and exercise. I hope my advice will be helpful to you. Yours, Dr. Lee 【详解】1、题干解读：题目假设你是Teenager杂志的主编，最近收到读者Rick的来信，他向你倾诉了他的苦恼，他因太胖被同学们嘲笑，请你给他一些合理的建议帮助他摆脱烦恼，可适当发挥。 2、写作指导：本文应该以第一人称和第二人称来叙述内容；时态采用一般现在时为主；介绍建议时，应详细具体，简单明了，逻辑性强，保证条理清晰。 8．书面表达 假设你是David，你的好朋友Toby非常喜欢体育运动，但是他的父母不允许他花费太多时间在运动上，为此他很苦恼。请你根据下面的提示给他写一封信，针对他的问题，提出你的建议，并给他一些安慰和鼓励。 提示：1. What should David do in his study？2. What should David talk to his parents？ 3. What should David do to his parents？ 要求：1. 语句通顺、符合逻辑，可适当发挥；2. 70词左右。开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Dear Toby， I’m sorry to hear that ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours， David 【答案】Dear Toby, I'm sorry to hear that you have problems with your parents. As for your problems, I have two pieces of advice. First, finish your homework on time every day，and listen to the teachers carefully in class. Make sure that you won't fall behind. Second, have a talk with your parents. You should let them know that doing sports doesn't take up your study time. Instead, it is good for both your study and health. Just be patient with your parents. I think they will understand you. Yours, David 【详解】 1.    题干解读：这是一封建议信，短文要求我们以David的身份给好朋友Toby写信，对他遇到的问题提出自己的建议。题目中利用问题的形式，列出了文章的主要内容，这也是学生们写作的依据。审题可知，短文应用一般现在时，第一人称和第二人称来叙述。 2.    例文点评：这是一篇优秀的作文，短文有以下几个优点：首先文章内容充实、完整，提出的建议很合理；层次清晰，用First, Second列出了自己的建议。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，语法规范、准确，语言得体；句式结构完整，符合英语的表达习惯；最后使用了较丰富的短语和句型，如宾语从句、状语从句、祈使句等的使用，增加了文章的表现力。 3.    高分亮点： 短语：as for；have problems with；on time；listen to；in class；fall behind；have a talk with；take up；be good for；be patient with。 句型：First, finish your homework on time every day，and listen to the teachers carefully in class.；You should let them know that doing sports doesn't take up your study time. Instead, it is good for both your study and health。 9．假如你的名字叫李华，每个学期伊始，班级都要竞选班长，你打算下学期成为班长，为班级贡献自己的力量，请你写一篇竞选宣言，让班级同学支持你。内容需涵盖以下要点： 1.如果我成为班长，我会每周召开一次学生会议，交流想法，解决问题； 2.如果我成为班长，我会在班级里放一块留言板，同学们写出自己的感想，增进彼此理解； 3.如果我成为班长，我会制作班级报纸，发挥同学们的特长； 4.如果我成为班长，我会更加外向积极，组织各种有意义的活动，使我们的班级生活丰富多彩。 提示词语：run for monitor（竞选班长）；student meeting；exchange ideas；solve the problems；a message board板）；helpful；understand each other；do something for it；organize more meaningful activities；colorful 要求：1.要点完整，表达清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯； 2.80词左右，开头及结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Hello, boys and girls. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ That’s all. Thank you for your support. 【答案】One possible version: Hello, boys and girls. I am Li Hua Running for monitor makes me very happy. If I become the monitor, I’ll certainly do the following things. Firstly, I plan to have a student meeting every week. Then we can exchange ideas and solve the problems together. Secondly, I’ll put a message board in the classroom. Students can write their ideas and study experience on the board. I think it will be helpful for students to understand each other. Thirdly, I will make a new kind of newspaper for our class. I know that most of you like reading the news. I hope everyone can do something for it. Lastly, I’ll be more outgoing and active and I will organize more meaningful activities. That will make our life colorful. That’s all. Thank you for your support. 【详解】1.题干解读：本文是一篇竞选稿。在写作时应承接短文开头，首先进行自我介绍，然后介绍自己成为班长后的打算，主要包括四个方面的内容，最后感谢大家支持。 2.写作指导：本文应该用第一人称进行介绍；时态采用一般将来时为主。句式要灵活多变，不要单一使用if条件状语从句。在介绍自己成为班长后打算要做的事情时，要有逻辑性，可以采用表示顺序的词，firstly，secondly，thirdly或者first，next，then，at last等。注意对提示词的应用，语句要通顺，条理要清晰。 10．为提高同学们的英语口语水平，学校决定举行以“If I become a teacher”为主题的演讲比赛。假如你是张珊，请写一篇演讲稿参加此次比赛。 要求：80词左右。演讲稿的标题、开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 If I become a teacher Hello, everyone! My name is Zhang Shan. If I become a teacher, ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】高分范文： If I become a teacher Hello, everyone! My name is Zhang Shan. If I become a teacher, I will make friends with my students. I will be friendly to them. If they are in trouble, I will try my best to help them. If I become a teacher, I will teach my students well and be always there to help them with their schoolwork. If I become a teacher, I will keep on studying and improving myself so that my students can get more from me. Becoming a teacher is my dream. I believe my dream will come true. That’s all. Thank you! 【详解】 1.题干解读：该题目要求写一份演讲稿，属于应用文写作。在写作时应承接短文的开头；接下来主要叙述作为教师自己都会做些什么；然后呼应题目表达希望；最后表达谢意。 2.写作指导：本文题目是If I become a teacher，需以第一人称和一般将来时展开叙述；内容需讲清楚自己做老师的做法：和学生交朋友；帮助学生解决困难；教好学生，帮助他们的学业；继续学习，提高自己。写作时需做到表达流畅，叙述有条理。 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！28 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$