读后续写- 脱离险境A weather turn读文本+理框架 学历案-2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

续写讲解（脱离险境 课时一） I 考题内容(tick√)：爱 相互帮助 克服困难 脱离险境 改正缺点 自我成长 II解题策略（5Read+ 4Draft +Sample） 1. 5Read 1) What: read for surroundings & significance ___________(animal/object/event) → ________________________________(significance) 2) How: read for the plot 3)Theme: read for the influence ___________________________________________________________________ 4)Who : Read for characters；personality& behavior Character Personality Behavior . 5)The first sentence of the writing part: Para 1 ____________________________________________________________ Para 2_____________________________________________________________ The hidden clue in Para. 1 :_____________________________________________________ 2. 4Draft 1) Draft the influence(the last sentence) __________________________________________________________________ 2) Draft the 3 sentences of Paragraph 1 &2 to follow the given sentences Para1 Plot1 ____________________________________________________(2nd ) Plot2____________________________________________________(Last) Para2 Plot3____________________________________________________(2nd ) 3)Draft the outlines(at least 4 plots→ feeling) Para1 Plot1 _ → _ ____________ Plot2 → ____________ Para2 Plot3 → Plot4 → III Appreciate the passage: Suddenly, the weather took an unexpected turn. Overhead gathered dark clouds and a strong wind began to blow. In no time, heavy rain started pouring down, wetting us thoroughly within moments. The forest winding paths became muddy and slippery, making it even more difficult for us to find some possible signs. We had been walking anxiously for about an hour around the thick forests, eventually, realising that we got lost entirely and the temperature also dropped rapidly. What’s worse,we only have little water and wet food, let alone our cellphone or other supplies due to the unexpected storm. Having no choice, we found a rock cliff, consistently yelling for help. Yell as we did for help, no one came. Exhausted and hungry, we were swept over by a feeling of hopelessness and panic. (126) Just when we were about to give up, a faint light appeared in the distance. Immediately, a ray of hope surged within us. We stumbled towards the light, our tired and sour legs finding new strength. Approaching the faint light more and more closely, we noticed that it was the light from Mrs. Evans's cabin. We rushed to the cabin and knocked on the door eagerly, hoping that Mrs. Evans, a kind and warm-hearted woman, was in the cabin. As soon as she welcomed us inside, she provided dry clothes, hot drinks and some food for us. We felt overwhelmed by a mixture of exhaustion relief and gratitude. Feeling blessed, we were safe and sound. Not until at that moment did we realize that the faint light in the darkness is hope, which would bloom in the long river of our memory, forever. (128) IV续写基本要求(tick√))： 1.书写：清晰、整齐、整洁 ___________ 2.篇幅：留白0.3-0.5（至多3情节；每个自然段5-8个句子） ___________ 3.时态：铅笔圈谓语动词__________________ 原文一致 __________________ 4.句式：多样（半倒装、全倒装； 强调句型；定语从句； 非谓语；省略句；with 复合结构... ） 5.结尾：正能量 _____________________ 6.衔接：1）第一、二自然段首句衔接（提示句）； ____________ 2）第一自然段末尾衔接第二然段首句（提示句）； _____________ 3）结尾句回扣主题 ____________ Name ___________ Class ____________ NO. ______________ Mark_____________ Suddenly, the weather took an unexpected turn.____________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________ Just when we were about to give up, a faint light appeared in the distance.____________________ ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________ 书写：清晰 整齐 整洁 ______ 篇幅: 句子 ___________ 留白 ____________ 时态 正能量 衔接: 1. 2. 3. 句式: ____________________________ Original Text Nature, while beautiful, could also be unpredictable and merciless. But most importantly we bear in mind that in the darkest times, there's always a light at the end of the tunnel, just like Mrs. Evans's cabin light One bright summer day, my friend Peter and I decided to take an adventure into the unexplored paths of the Great Smoky Mountains. Blessed with rich biodiversity and fascinating landscapes, the national park seemed a perfect getaway. Little did we know that our casual(随意的) hiking would soon turn into an unexpected personal incident and remain in our memories forever. We set off early in the morning, equipped with our backpacks and a map that was supposed to guide us through the winding paths. The sun was up, casting long shadows on the forest floor as we set off on our journey. We trekked(艰难行走), laughed, and wondered at the beauty of nature around us. As we trekked through the thick forests, taking in the natural wonders around us, we couldn't help but feel a sense of adventure coursing through our body. The path was rough and rocky, but we persisted(坚持) through the challenging landscape. Midway through our exploration, we came upon a breathtaking waterfall, its shining water pouring down the rocks in a quiet and peaceful melody. We sat down by the water's edge, taking a moment to get lost in the beauty of nature. The cool mist from the waterfall refreshed us, and we felt more alive than ever. But our idyllic(田园诗般的) moment was short - lived. As the day went on, we trekked deeper into the wilderness, eager to explore every corner of this natural paradise. We were so absorbed in the beauty of nature that we just didn't notice our way and it seemed that we could not find the way back to the familiar part of the forest. Frightened, we hurried to find our way back but the thick forests and winding paths only served to confuse us further. We tried to remember any possible signs that might lead us back. No sooner had we celebrated our return to the clear paths than something worse happened. Suddenly, the weather took an unexpected turn.__________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Just when we were about to give up, a faint light appeared in the distance.____________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 答案： I 考题内容(tick√)： 爱, 相互帮助， 克服困难 ，脱离险境√， 改正缺点，自我成长 II解题策略（5Read+ 4Draft） 1.5Read 1）What: read for surroundings & significance Unexpected incident, a light (event) → bear in mind, hope ( significance) 2）How: read for the plotsun up; trekked, laughed; wonder the beauty of nature abreathtaking waterfall; lost in beauty of nature, refreshed;energetic path: rough; rocky we persisted didn’t notice our way; not find ..way back to the familiar ...the forest; confused us further 3）Theme: read for the influence we bear in mind that in the darkest times, there's always a light at the end of the tunnel 4)Who : Read for characters；personality& behavior Character Behavior Personality Peter &I casual hiking;equip with backups, a map, unexpected personal incident; memories forever; trekked; laughed; persisted adventurous,considerate/ thoughtful; have fun confused; frightened Mrs. Evans in the darkest times; a light at the end of ... helpful; kind Setting (path Nature) winding paths; thick forest; natural paradise;wildness rough; rocky; unpredictable and merciless; challenging beautiful,peaceful; fascinating 5）The first sentence of the writing part: Para 1 weather ... unexpected turn..._____________________________________ Para 2 be about to give up..., a faint light appeared ..._______________________ The hidden clue in Para. 1 : encounter big challenges due to the bad weather...., hopeless. 2. 4Draft 3) Draft the influence(the last sentence) Not until at that moment did we realize that the faint light in the darkness is hope, which bloomed in the long river of our memory, forever. __________ __________________ 2）Draft the 3 sentences of Paragraph 1 &2 to follow the given sentences Para1 Overhead gathered dark clouds , and a roaring wind began to blow. (2nd ) Exhausted and hungry, we were swept over by a feeling of hopelessness and panic. (Last) Para 2 Immediately, a ray of hope surged within us. _____________________ ___ 3)Draft the outline(at least 4 plots→ feelings) Para1 Plot1 _ 天气变糟_ → __ 惊慌失措_________ Plot2__陷入绝境，脱险无望__→ __绝望（恐惧，饥饿，寒冷..._)_ Para2 Plot3 光；看到希望 → ___________激动，开心______ Plot4 得到Mrs Evan 的帮助 → 轻松，幸运，感激 III Appreciate the passage: Suddenly, the weather took an unexpected turn. Overhead gathered dark clouds, and a strong 方位副词，至于句首，句子全倒装。 wind began to blow. In no time, heavy rain started pouring down, wetting us thoroughly within 时间短语连接 非谓语作状语，表结果。 moments. The forest winding paths became muddy and slippery, making it more difficult for 非谓语作状语，表结果。 us to return to the right route. We had been walking anxiously for about an hour around the thick 扣原文信息 forests, eventually realising that we got lost once again and the temperature also dropped rapidly. 扣原文信息 副词连接，非谓语作状语，表结果; 回扣原文 What’s worse, we only have little water and some wet food, let alone our cellphone or other 语篇连词 supplies due to the unexpected storm. Having no choice, we found a rock cliff, contentiously 非谓语作状语，表原因。 扣原文信息 yelling for help. Yell as we did for help, no one came. Exhausted and hungry, we were swept over 非谓语作状语，表伴随 as引导让步状语 形容词作状语，表原因 by a feeling of hopelessness and panic. (126) 被动语态& 无灵主语 Just when we were about to give up, a faint light appeared in the distance. Immediately, a ray 副词连接 of hope surged through us. We stumbled towards the light, our tired and sour legs finding new 使强烈地感到 跌跌撞撞地走；蹒跚而行 独立主格结构 strength. Approaching the faint light more and more closely, we noticed that it was the light from 非谓语作状语，表伴随 Mrs. Evans's cabin. We rushed to the cabin and knocked on the door eagerly, hoping that Mrs. 动作链：多个动态动作连接 Evans, a kind and warm-hearted woman, was in the cabin. As soon as she welcomed us inside, 同位语 语篇词连接 she provided dry clothes, hot drinks and some food for us. We felt overwhelmed by a mixture of exhaustion relief and gratitude. We were safe and sound, feeling blessed. Not until at that moment 无灵主语 非谓语作状语，表结果。 not until句首，半倒装 did we realize that the faint light in the darkness wast the hope, which would bloom in the long 非限制性定语从句，回扣原文的开头carry....in mind river of our memory, forever. (124) IV续写基本要求(tick√))： 1.书写：清晰、整齐、整洁 ___________ 2.篇幅：留白0.3-0.5（至多3情节；每个自然段5-8个句子） ___________ 3.时态：铅笔圈谓语动词__________________ 原文一致 __________________ 4.句式：多样（半倒装、全倒装； 强调句型；定语从句； 非谓语；省略句；with 复合结构... ） 5.结尾：正能量 _____________________ 6.衔接：1）第一、二自然段首句衔接（提示句）； ____________ 2）第一自然段末尾衔接第二然段首句（提示句）； _____________ 3）结尾句回扣主题 ____________ 第 1 页 共 3 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$