Unit 6 单元写作指导与演练-【同步写作课】2024-2025学年八年级英语上册单元写作深度指导（人教版）

Unit 6 I'm going to study computer science. 单元写作指导与演练 【单元话题解读】 本单元写作情境属于“人与自我”主题范畴中“生活与学习”这一主题群,涉及子主题“自我认识、自我管理和自我提升”。 本单元的话题是“生活目标”，与此相关的写作任务是谈论未来的打算。常见的写作任务是谈论对自己或他人未来的职业和理想生活的规划，体裁多为说明文或书信等应用文。写作时可用be going to表示将来的打算。首先谈论自己未来的打算，然后写出具体的行动计划，结尾可以表明自己的决心或希望，也可以询问读者有什么样的愿望。描写计划时常常使用一般将来时态，且涉及到很多与职业相关的词，如： teacher，actor，doctor,farmer,engineer,driver,scientist,reporter 等。 【写作目标】 通过围绕讨论将来的目标及实现此目标应采取的措施这一话题，帮助学生树立自己的生活目标和制订相应的学习计划，并引导学生注意在写此类短文时要进行整体布局，做到详略得当，心中有数。  写作技巧 本单元的写作项目是用本单元所学的重点句型叙述你的未来理想以及今后的打算。写此类文章时要注意以下几点：（1）选择正确的时态。由于是对未来的事情进行计划，文章应以一般将来时态be going to do 的句子结构为主，be going to 结构有人称和数的变化，写作时应注意；（2）叙述要有条理，先叙述未来的理想，再叙述为实现理想愿望而要采取的行动，在谈论行动时，也要注意主次分明及先后顺序；（3）在结尾可以谈自己的决心或希望。 【写作步骤】 “总—分—总”法写“新年计划类”作文 ◆ 总: 总述新年计划; ◆ 分: 具体介绍新年计划; ◆ 总: 表达感想。 【单元素材积累】 写作积累 (一)相关短语积累  1.want to be 想成为 2.would like to 想要 3.so that 为了；便于 4.in order to 为了 5. not only...but also...不但……而且…… 6.care about 关心 7.come true 实现 8.grow up 长大；成熟 9.get good grades 取得好成绩 (二）相关句型积累  描述计划愿望常用的句型:  (1) I am going to. . .  (2) I am used to doing. . .  (3) After I finish middle school, I want to. . .  (4) He decides to. . . during the vacation.  (5) When I grow up, I'm going to. . .  (6) I hope my dream can come true one day.  (7) I plan to. . . I think I should. . .  ◆开头句 ①It is important for teenagers to have dreams. ②A new year means a new start. I have some plans for the new year. ③I'm glad to know that you want to be a doctor when you grow up. Here is my advice. ◆中间句 ①Besides,I will read some books on medicine. ②I will do whatever I can to make my dream come true. ③Last but not least,I will take up a hobby like painting or taking photos. ◆结尾句 ①I really hope your dream will come true. ②I believe as long as I try my best,my dream will come true one day. ③Although resolutions may be too difficult to keep,I will try my best to make my resolutions come true. 【名言积累】 ①A good beginning is half done.良好的开端是成功的一半。 ②Where there's a will,there's a way.有志者事竟成。 【实例讲解1】 【写作任务】（Section B 3b&3c） 假如你所在的英语角这两周正围绕“新年计划”这一主题让同学们进行发言。上周你已经分享了你的第一条计划，请你根据以下提示，写一篇短文详细介绍其他三条计划，为本周的分享做准备。 My New Year's Resolutions 1. Personal improvement 2. Improving my physical health 3. Improving my relationships with my family and friends 4. Doing better at school 【审清题目】 内容：写新年计划。 文体：说明文。 时态：以一般将来时为主。 人称：以第一人称为主。 【头脑风暴】 【提供素材】 ◆常用语块 补全下列语块对应的英文表达。 1. Improving my physical health: drink enough water, eat healthier food, (1)______________(少吃快餐), eat a healthy breakfast, start an exercise program, get more exercise / exercise more, play more sports, go for walks and get a lot of fresh air, go to bed early, get up early, get enough sleep, (2)______________(一年看两次牙医), make myself healthier, have the energy (精力) to do other things well 2. Improving my relationships with my family and friends: spend more time with them, (3)______________(关心他们), put myself in their shoes (设身处地为他们着想), remember their birthdays, be a good listener, look for ways to help them or make their lives better, (4)______________(一起培养一个新的爱好), help with the housework, discuss my problems with my family, keep in touch with my friends, share my happiness with friends, show my love for them, get closer to them 3. Doing better at school: listen to my teachers carefully, take notes (记笔记) carefully in class, (5)______________(写下课上的要点), ask questions as many as possible, finish my homework on time, read notes before going to bed, read more books, (6)______________(制订周计划), learn from others, not miss class, make the most of class time, organize (安排) my time, get better grades, find the right way to learn, become an organized (有条理的) person ◆常用句型 • This year I want / need to ... • In 2023 I'm going to start / stop / learn ... • I plan to ... • I'd like to ... • I hope / believe (相信) that ... • I'm not going to ... • I'm thinking of / planning ... Key: 1. eat less fast food   2. go to the dentist twice a year 3. care about them   4. take up a new hobby together   5. write down the important points in class   6. make a weekly plan 【谋篇布局】 将括号内的汉语翻译成英语，补全短文。 Key: 1. I'm going to eat healthier food  2. I'm going to cook meals for them on their birthdays 3. I'm going to keep in touch with them and be a good listener 4. I hope I can get closer to my friends 5. I'm going to take notes carefully in class 【实例解析2】 青少年是国家的未来和民族的希望,青少年的梦想与中国梦密不可分。编织人生梦想是青少年时期的重要生命主题,它能不断激发青少年对生命的热情和勇气,让生活更有色彩。有梦想,就有希望。你校英文报设立了“少年梦·中国梦”专栏,请根据以下提示,以“My Dream”为题,写一篇80词左右的英语短文投稿。 提示： 1.What is your dream? 2.Why is it your dream? 3.How are you going to achieve that? 参考词汇：meaningful,help,study,finish college ►►审题指导 1.文体：说明文 2.人称：第一人称 3.时态：一般现在时和一般将来时 4.写作要点：明确写作要点,所给的要点要全,并加入自主发挥的部分。 ►►思路点拨 My Dream It is important for teenagers to have dreams. I want to be a doctor ①when I grow up. For me,growing up in a family of doctors,my parents ②make a big difference to my dream.③Whenever I see them take care of the patients,I feel deeply moved. I will do ④whatever I can to make my dream come true. After finishing high school,I am going to study medicine at a medical university. What's more,I must study ⑤as hard as I can.Also,I plan to do more exercise to ⑥improve my physical health. ⑦No pains,no gains.I believe ⑧as long as I try my best,my dream will come true one day. 点评: ①when引导的时间状语从句,③Whenever引导的时间状语从句和④whatever引导的宾语从句的使用使文章的表达更高级。②make a big difference to,⑤as hard as I can,⑥improve my physical health和⑧as long as的使用使文章的语言更丰富且有逻辑。 ⑦“No pains,no gains.”谚语的使用使文章的表达更有哲理。本篇范文语言丰富有逻辑,同时能够灵活运用本单元所学语法—— 一般将来时和短语,如improve my physical health等。 写作练笔 【写作任务】  新的学期已经开始,对于新的学期你肯定充满憧憬,你有什么新的打算？请根据以下提示,以“My New Year's Resolutions”为题,写一篇80词左右的英语短文。 提示： 1.What are you going to do about study? 2.What are you going to do about your physical health? 3.What are you going to do to get on with your family? ►►审题指导 1.文体：________ 2.人称：__________ 3.时态：________________________ 4.写作要点：①__________________；②__________________________；③ ________________________。 ►►思路点拨 My New Year's Resolutions A new year means a new start. I have some plans for the new year. First of all,I'm going to spend more time studying English,so I will keep diaries in English. Besides,to improve my physical health,I will get lots of exercise,such as running and playing basketball. What's more,I'm going to help out with more housework like cleaning the floor,doing the dishes and so on. Nothing is impossible if I put my heart into it. Although resolutions may be too difficult to keep,I will try my best to make my resolutions come true. 【真题解析】 1．青春，是心里有火，眼里有光，我们这一代人的想象力，不足以想象你们的未来！青春路上，你对未来职业的憧憬是什么？请你以“I want to be a/an...”为题写一篇短文。须涵盖以下几个内容： 1. What is your dream job? 2. Where are you going to work? 3. Which motto(座右铭) encourages you most? 4. Why do you like this job? 5. How will you get your future dream job? 6..... 要点提示： 1. 80-100词。 2. 请你根据以上要求，结合自己的实际情况写出你的观点，并适当发挥。 3. 文章中不得出现真实人名和校名。 4. 字迹工整，语言流畅，表达正确，逻辑清晰。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考例文                                         I want to be a teacher. I have a dream. I want to be a teacher at the middle school where I studied. The motto encourages me most is “Teachers’ biggest happiness is to see the children grow up!” I think teachers are very important people in our life. They teach us knowledge. The help us with our study. They give us confidence. If I’m a teacher, I’ll be very kind and patient with my students and try my best to make my lessons interesting. To be a teacher, I’ll work hard from now on and get good grades in my study. I won’t give up my dream. I think it will come true soon. 【详解】1.本文是一篇话题作文。要求根据题目“I want to be a/an...”和提示内容写一篇作文。 2.本文时态以一般现在时和一般将来时为主；人称以第一人称和第三人称为主。写作时注意语句通顺，语意连贯，紧扣要点，注意句子之间的连贯和过渡，涵盖所给提示。 2．假如你是校报英文版的小记者，你们校报对同学们的新年计划做了一次调查。请根据表格中的调查信息，写一篇新年计划的调查报告。 New Year's Resolutions Number work harder in school 100% exercise more to keep fit 75% learn to play an instrument 14% watch more TV 0% All students=100%       Most students=51%-99%        Some students=1%-50%       No students=0% 要求：1. 语言通顺、流畅； 2. 70词左右。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: Here are the results of the students’ New Year’s resolutions in our school. All students are going to work harder, because they all want to get better grades. Most students are going to exercise more to keep fit. Some students want to learn to play an instrument. But none of the students are going to watch more TV. 【详解】1. 题干解读：这篇作文要求考生根据表格中的调查信息，写一篇新年计划的调查报告，属于给材料作文。 2. 写作指导：审题可知，这篇短文应以第三人称和一般将来时展开叙述。写作时紧扣表格提示内容陈述不同的新年计划，全面反映出“努力学习”“多做运动”“学习乐器”和“多看电视”等四个方面的调查结果。行文注意主谓一致，保证无语法和单词拼写错误。 3．假如你是王蕾，新的一年快到了，你和家人的新年计划是什么呢？请你根据下面表格里面的提示内容，写一篇英语短文，在英语课上跟大家分享你们的新年计划。 父亲 多做运动，保持健康 母亲 学唱歌，丰富生活 王蕾 努力学习，提高成绩 要求：80词左右，可适当发挥。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version： A new year is coming. Well begun is half done, so I’ll make some New Year’s resolutions for my family. Here are my parents’ and my New Year’s resolutions. My father often went to see the doctor last year. So in the coming year, he is going to get more exercise to keep healthy. My mother is interested in singing. She is going to learn to sing to make her life more colorful. As for me, I’m going to study hard so that I can get good grades in the coming year. These are my New Year’s resolutions, I think we’ll do better in the new year. 【详解】1. 题干解读：这篇作文要求考生根据表格提示的内容，谈一谈自己和家人的新年计划，属于给材料作文。 2. 写作指导：审题可知，这篇短文应以第一、三人称和一般将来时为主，以一般现在时为辅来叙述。写作时紧扣要点提示，分别写出父亲、母亲和自己的新年计划各是什么，最后表达愿望。行文注意主谓一致，保证无语法和单词拼写错误。 4．假如你很有计划，执行力也很强，你和美国朋友Jane分享了第一个新年计划之后，她表示对你的其他三个计划也很感兴趣。请根据下面所给提示，写一篇短文介绍你的另外三个计划，并说明你计划如何去做以及为什么这么做。 My other three resolutions 1. Improving my physical health. 2. Improving my relationships with family and friends. 3. Doing better at school. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version： Hey, Jane! Here I want to share my other three resolutions with you. My second resolution is how to improve my physical health. I am going to eat more fruit and vegetables and play more sports because they are good for my health. My third resolution is about improving my relationships with my family and friends. Both of my parents like tennis. I am going to take up the same hobby as them. Then I can often play tennis with them. Doing more things together will make us all happy. What's more, I am going to care about my friends more and help them more. I hope we will have a better relationship. My last resolution is about how to do better at school. I am going to listen more carefully in class and do my homework better. It can help me get better grades. Well, where there is a will, there is a way. I'm sure I can achieve my resolutions if I try my best! 【详解】1.题干解读：本文属于材料文写作，你和美国朋友Jane分享了第一个新年计划之后，她表示对你的其他三个计划也很感兴趣，根据题干内容提示，向Jane介绍自己的另外三个计划，并说明你计划如何去做以及为什么这么做。 2.写作指导：本文采用一般现在时结合一般将来时；以第一人称为主；本文可分三个层次来写，第一个层次，引出下文，说明要和对方介绍自己的另外三个计划；第二个层次详细介绍其他三个计划；最后一层总结自己会尽力实现这些计划。可适当发挥，保证条理清晰。 5．人人都有梦想，假设你是埃米，请以“My Dream Job”为题写一篇短文，畅想一下你的未来。内容包括： 1. 你想做什么样的工作？ 2. 你喜欢这项工作的原因是什么？ 3. 为这个工作你准备了什么或应该怎样做好准备？ 作文要求：1. 不得在作文中出现学校的真实名称和学生的真实姓名； 2. 语句连贯，词数80左右。 My Dream Job ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: My dream Job I’d like to be a teacher when I grow up. Teachers help young people get knowledge and make them not only become cleverer and cleverer, but also be a good person, so teachers should be kind, friendly and helpful. In order to be a knowledgeable and skillful teacher, now I must study hard at all my subjects. I must learn a lot. Of course I should be kind to my friends and be polite to my teachers and parents to build up my good personality. I believe I can make my dream come true by working hard. 【详解】题干解读：题目要求以“My Dream Job”为题写一篇英语短文；要求包含所有提示内容，不能出现真实信息。 写作指导：此作文时态宜用一般现在时，采用第一人称口吻。此作文可采用2段落格式，第一段：介绍自己梦想的工作是什么，为什么喜欢这项工作以及为这个工作准备了什么；第二段：总结全文，相信通过努力能够实现自己的梦想。 6．新的一年马上就要到了，李华制定了新年决心，计划在新的一年中有新的气象。请根据表格中的信息，以第一人称的形式说说李华的新年计划，并谈谈为什么制定这样的计划以及如何实施。 写作要求： 1. 文章需要包括表格内所有的信息； 2. 可适当发挥但不得出现真实的个人信息(人名、地名、学校名等)； 3. 词数：80左右(开头已给出， 不计入总词数)。 New Year's resolutions Why How Take up a new hobby Get a lot of exercise Improve English ... ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考范文: New Year is coming, so I am going to make some New Year’s resolutions. First, I want to take up a new hobby. I plan to learn to play an instrument because I like music very much. I’m going to practice it every day. Next, I want to get a lot of exercise to keep fit. I’m going to run every morning. Then, I want to improve my English because I want to get good grades. I’m going to read English books and write diaries in English. Finally, I want to be a school magazine’s reporter because I like talking with people. I’m going to write articles. I think I am able to keep them and I hope I am going to improve my life. 【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作。内容是李华制定了新年计划，要求根据表格中的信息，介绍一下他制定这样的计划的目的和实施方案。 2.写作指导：本文应该用第一人称来叙述作文内容；时态采用一般将来时和一般现在时为主； 写作时应承接短文的开头；要注意运用first，next，then，finally等词来介绍计划的内容。最后一段介绍作者能坚持计划并能提高自己。 7．假如你叫李晨，新年即将到来，请根据下面表格的内容，给你的美国笔友Larry 写一封e-mail，谈谈你和家人的新年计划。 要求： 1. 短文必须包含表格所给提示内容，可以适当发挥； 2. 文中不能出现真实人名、校名及其他相关信息； 3. 70词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 People New Year’s resolutions How are they going to do that next year? Father get a lot of exercise run every morning Mother learn to play the piano practice it three times a week cook delicious food join the cooking club Li Chen get good grades study really hard … … Dear Larry, New Year is coming. My family made our New Year’s resolutions yesterday. Do you want to know about them? Let me tell you. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ What about your New Year’s resolutions? I look forward to hearing from you. Yours, Li Chen 【答案】One possible version: Dear Larry, New Year is coming. My family made our New Year’s resolutions yesterday. Do you want to know about them? Let me tell you. My father wants to get a lot of exercise. He is going to run every morning. My mother hopes to learn to play the piano. She is going to practice it three times a week. She is going to cook some delicious food for us. So she has to join the cooking club. As for me, I have a lot of New Year’s resolutions. I want to get good grades. I will study really hard. After class I am writing articles to my school magazine because I want to be a reporter in the future. If I work hard, I think my dream will come true. What about your New Year’s resolutions? I look forward to hearing from you. Yours, Li Chen 【详解】1.题干解读：这是一封电子邮件。要求以李晨的名义，根据表格所提供的信息给美国笔友Larry写一封e-­mail，谈谈你和家人的新年计划。 2.写作指导：首先要注意邮件的格式，时态主要为一般现在时和一般将来时，人称主要为第一人称和第三人称。承接文章的第一段，根据表格提示内容，第二段介绍父母的新年计划；第三段介绍自己的新年计划。在写作时，注意紧扣主题，连句成篇，要层次清楚，要点分明，中心突出。 8．假如学校本周要进行英语演讲比赛，主题为“My Dream”。请你根据以下提示，写一篇英语演讲稿向大家介绍你的梦想。 提示：1. What do you want to be? 2. Why do you want to be a(n)...? 3. How are you going to be a(n)...? 要求：80词左右，可适当发挥。演讲稿的开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Hello, everyone! I’m happy I can share my dream with all of you here. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: Hello, everyone! I’m happy I can share my dream with all of you here. I’m going to be a writer when I grow up. The reason is that I’m very creative and I like reading and writing. To be a writer, I’m going to read more books written by famous writers because I can learn a lot from them. I’m going to keep on writing articles and send them to magazines. No pains, no gains. I believe as long as I try my best, my dream will come true some day. Thank you. 【详解】1. 题干解读：这篇作文要求考生根据写作提示，写一篇英语演讲稿介绍自己的梦想，属于讲稿类作文。 2. 写作指导：审题可知，这篇短文应以第一人称和一般将来时为主，以一般现在时为辅来叙述。写作时承接开头，要写出梦想是什么，为什么有这个梦想，怎样做才能实现梦想，最后谈一谈自己的感受。行文注意主谓一致，保证无语法和单词拼写错误。 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！28 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$