Unit 4 Section Ⅳ Writing——写一封关于旅行的电子邮件(Word教参)-【状元桥·优质课堂】2024-2025学年高中英语选择性必修第二册（人教版2019）

Section Ⅳ　Writing——写一封关于旅行的电子邮件 本单元的写作任务是写一封旅游电子邮件，也就是以书信的形式写一篇旅游报告。旅游报告主要描写游览中的所见所闻以及所感。对于此类话题的文章可以按照以下几个步骤来写： 1．点明主题。简要介绍所游览的地方。 2．具体描述旅行的经历和见闻。描述时，应按照一定的时间、空间或逻辑顺序，这样可以使内容层次清晰。同时还应分清主次，详略得当，要突出最有特色、最感兴趣的事物。 3．描述自己的感受。既可以是旅游过程中对眼前景物的所思所想，也可以是所经历的人或事对自己的影响，但要与主题相呼应。 跟课文学写作范式 (一)课文范式提炼 (二)常用范式推荐 跟课文学亮点表达 阅读文章第一至第四自然段，习得以下素养 ★学亮点表达 1．第一段第三句中运用形容词misty和现在分词短语rising from the great Niagara Falls对云(clouds)进行了描写，生动形象；第二段第一句中用hundreds of和of glass and steel描写看到的摩天大楼(skyscrapers)，用old fashioned描写看到的汽车(cars)，生动具体，具有很强的画面感和感染力。第四段第二句用感叹句，淋漓尽致地表达了景观和事件给她们带来的心理感受。 2．第一段第三句中运用了分词短语作状语和which引导的非限制性定语从句，第二段直接引语中的第二句运用了if引导的宾语从句，第四段第二句运用了so连接的并列复合句和that 引导的宾语从句，这些高级句式的运用有效增加了表意效果，四个段落里景点、人物、经历的描写精彩纷呈，使她们在多伦多的经历给读者留下了深刻印象。 [微写作1]——补全句子 (1)远处是洞庭湖，烟波浩渺，波涛滚滚。 Far in the distance lies the Dongting Lake, a vast expanse of misty, rolling waters . (2)你没看到天花板上挂着的老式煤气灯吗？ Can't you see the old-fashioned gas lamp hanging from the ceiling ? (3)知道你要和你弟弟一起来参观城市，我很高兴给你一些建议。 Knowing that you're going to visit my city with your younger brother , I'm pleased to give you some advice.(分词作状语；宾语从句) (4)当我们沉浸在令人惊叹的风景或历史遗迹中时，我们感到兴奋和放松，忘记了来自工作和生活的压力。 When we are immersed in the breathtaking scenery or historical sites , we feel excited and relaxed , forgetting pressure from both work and life. ★学逻辑衔接 第一段第一句中的before they had to proceed to the next leg of their trip，第二段第二句中的As they walked north from the harbour area以及第三段第一句中的around dusk等时间状语的运用，以及四个段落中不同景点的呈现，突出了时间和空间线索，使得行文层次清晰、逻辑缜密。 阅读文章第五至第九自然段，习得以下素养 ★学写作手法 第五段第二句使用了短语in contrast to，转到蒙特利尔的令人惊讶的经历，引起读者兴趣；第九段中运用overall对蒙特利尔的“声色俱佳”这一特点进行了总结；both…and和副词too的使用更是强化了读者对蒙特利尔这座城市的语言多样性和丰富的饮食文化的印象。 [微写作2]——补全句子 (1)同老式的社交网络相比，在线社交网络有极高的开放性，非常容易加入。 Online networks, in contrast to the old kind, are open to all and easy to join. (2)总的来说，作为一处著名的文物古迹，这个地方很值得参观。 Overall , as a famous cultural relic, the site is well worth visiting . (3)我妻子和我都对这次特别的经历很满意。 Both my wife and I are quite pleased with the special experience. 阅读文章第十自然段，习得以下素养 ★学亮点表达 1．第十段第二句中用beautiful cobblestone 修饰街道，用old brick修饰建筑物，用red 修饰枫叶，描绘出了蒙特利尔美轮美奂的景观。 2．第十段第二句中用副词happily描写了表姐妹二人美好的心情，也对此次美好的旅程进行总结。 [微写作3]——补全句子 (1)借着月光，我小心翼翼地打开包装纸，香味完全吸引了我，所以没有注意到父亲从后面进来。 By the light of the moon, I cautiously opened the packing paper, the delicious smell entirely attracted me in it without noticing my father entering behind. (2)大雪渐渐停了，但过了一会儿，一阵大风吹起了我们快要熄灭的火焰。 The heavy snow had stopped gradually , but some time later a powerful wind kicked up the faint flames of our dying fire . (一)输入好词 1．be located in/at/between　 位于…… 2．make a trip to 去……旅行 3．a feast for eyes 视觉盛宴 4．the good weather and breathtaking scenery 宜人的天气和令人惊叹的景色 5．an attractive place 一个吸引人的地方 6．from the view of 从……的观点来看 7．be open to the public 对公众开放 8．catch sight of 看到 9．National Tourist Attraction 国家级景区 10．Nature Reserve 自然保护区 11．World Cultural Heritage Site 世界文化遗产 12．Historical Site 古迹 (二)输入好句 1．介绍地理位置： ①The university is located in the eastern suburbs of the city.这所大学坐落在城市的东郊。 ②The Imperial Summer Resort is an imperial garden, located in the north of Chengde, Hebei Province.避暑山庄是一座皇家园林，它位于河北承德市区北部。 ③It extends from the Shanhai Pass to the Jiayu Pass in Gansu Province. 它从山海关一直绵延到甘肃省境内的嘉峪关。 2．介绍人口： Mexico City has a population of more than 20,000,000, which makes it one of the top 10 biggest cities in the world.墨西哥城有2 000多万人口，是世界十大人口城市之一。 3．介绍面积： The village covers an area of 300 hectares, of which 30 are for tea production. 这个村子占地300公顷，其中30公顷为茶园。 4．介绍历史： ①Standing on the top of the mountain, the temple has witnessed many changes in this area.坐落在山顶的寺庙见证了这个地区的许多变化。 ②It was first constructed in 221 BC. 它始建于公元前221年。 ③The Potala Palace served as the winter palace of the Dalai Lama. 布达拉宫是历世达赖喇嘛的冬宫。 ④The White Horse Temple is the first Buddhist temple in China.It has a history of over 1,900 years.白马寺是佛教传入我国后兴建的第一座寺院，拥有超过1 900年的历史。 5．介绍交通： It's very convenient to get there by taking Buses No.17, 69 or 59 besides Subway Line 2. 乘车到达那里很方便，除地铁2号线外，还可乘坐17路、69路、59路公交车。 6．介绍名胜古迹： ①Beijing has many places of interest, among which is the Forbidden City. 北京有许多名胜，其中就有紫禁城。 ②It symbolizes ancient civilization of China.它是中国古代文明的象征。 ③It was reconstructed during the Ming Dynasty. 它在明朝时被重新修缮。 7．介绍特色： ①As is known to us all, Mount Huashan is famous for its breathtaking cliffs and its unique characteristics.众所周知，华山以它险峻的悬崖和它独一无二的特征而出名。 ②Mount Huangshan is well known for its unique natural scenery, especially for its sunrises and sea of clouds. 黄山自然风景独特，尤以其日出和云海著称。 ③Changbai Mountains also boasts countless hot springs, which contributes to the prevention and treatment of skin diseases.长白山还有许多温泉，其泉水有助于防治皮肤病。 ④As one of the most inviting tourist attractions, Suzhou Gardens becomes the most popular themes of photographic works and traditional Chinese paintings.苏州园林是最吸引人的旅游目的地之一，也是摄影作品和传统国画最受欢迎的主题。 8．常用开头句： ①After a tiring day, we finally arrived in the old country.经过一天的劳累，我们终于到达了这个古老的国家。 ②Sitting back in my seat, I can't quite believe that I'm about to travel along the railway that many foreign experts claimed was “impossible”． 靠坐在火车座位上，我仍然不敢相信，我将要沿着许多外国专家声称“不可能建成”的铁路开始一段旅程。 9．常用中间句： It is a place you must visit and the extraordinary view will make you unwilling to leave. 这是一个你必须参观的地方，非凡的景色会让你不愿离开。 10．常用结束句： ①We were astonished by its beauty.It is well worth visiting. 我们震撼于它的美丽。它很值得参观。 ②It has been a great trip, filling us with so many happy memories.这是一次很棒的旅行，给我们留下了如此多美好的回忆。 ③It has been a wonderful trip so far, and I am loving the city! 到目前为止，这是一次美妙的旅行，我爱上这个城市了！ 【写作要求】 假定你是李华，上周去北京旅游，参观了长城。请根据以下信息，给你的英国朋友John写一封电子邮件，介绍该景点并谈谈你的参观感受。 历史 有两千多年的历史 特点 世界上最长的城墙，长20 000多千米； 建筑材料主要为石头、砖块，修建工作都是人工进行； 主要用于防御外来入侵者，沿墙每隔几百米就有一个烽火台(watchtower) 现状 世界著名旅游景点之一，每年吸引许多外国游客到长城观光旅游 注意：1.词数80左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 【四步成文】 第一步：审题谋篇 (一)审题 1．确定体裁：本文为 电子邮件 ； 2．确定人称：本文的主要人称应为第 一 人称； 3．确定时态：介绍长城时主要用 一般现在时 。 (二)构思 1．总：评价长城； 2．分：介绍长城的历史、特点和现状； 3．总：参观长城的感受。 第二步：由词扩句 1．上周，我去北京参观了长城。 Last week, I went to Beijing and visited the Great Wall . 2．长城长20 000多千米。 The Great Wall is more than 20,000 kilometers long . 3．它是世界上最长的城墙。 It is the longest wall in the world . 4．它有两千多年的历史。 It has a history of more than 2,000 years. 5．它由石头和砖块建成，几乎所有的修建工作都是人工完成的。 It is made of stone and bricks and almost all the construction was done by hand. 6．修建长城是为了防御外国侵略者，所以每隔几百米就有一个烽火台。 As the wall was built 　to defend the country against foreign invaders　, there was a watchtower every few hundred meters along the wall. 7．长城是中国著名旅游景点之一，每年吸引许多外国游客到长城观光旅游。 The Great Wall is one of the most famous places of interest in China and it attracts many foreign visitors every year. 第三步：句式升级 1．使用名词短语作同位语把第二步中的句2和句3合并为复合句 The Great Wall, the longest wall in the world, is more than 20,000 kilometers long. 2．用such…that…句型改写第二步中的句7 The Great Wall is such a famous place of interest in China that it attracts many foreign visitors every year. 第四步：连句成篇 One possible version： Dear John， Last week, I went to Beijing and visited the Great Wall. The Great Wall, the longest wall in the world, is more than 20,000 kilometers long.It has a history of more than 2,000 years.It is made of stone and bricks and almost all the construction was done by hand.As the wall was built to defend the country against foreign invaders, there was a watchtower every few hundred meters along the wall. Now, the Great Wall is such a famous place of interest in China that it attracts many foreign visitors every year. Yours， Li Hua 假定你是李华，你的外国好友George打算来中国游玩一周，请你为他推荐旅游景点，内容包括： 1．表示欢迎； 2．介绍景点； 3．表达祝愿。 注意：1.词数80左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 One possible version： Dear George， I'm glad to learn that you are planning to travel around China for a week.I'm writing to extend my warm welcome. I suggest that you go to Beijing for a visit.Beijing has much to offer for the tourists.You can go to the Great Wall first.You are also strongly recommended to tour around the Forbidden City, whose character is well preserved despite its old age.Not only will you learn more about Chinese history, but you will also appreciate the charm of traditional Chinese architecture. I hope you will enjoy your stay and have a good time travelling. Yours， Li Hua 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$