2024届高考英语二轮复习作文写作讲评课课件

写作讲评课 --- Reflection and internalization Learning Objectives 1. Correct the mistakes in your composition and rewrite the sentences by yourself. 2. Master the basic writing skills by analyzing the model and learn from it. 3. Internalize what you learned today by reciting. Activity1: Self study 5’ Correct the mistakes by yourselves according to the teacher’s evaluation. 根据老师的批阅，自己修改句子，并在练习本重写一遍改后的句子。 注意: 挑选几句重要的即可，不需要全写。写完后可以同桌或者组内 互相讨论修改。 Activity2: Feedback on the composition Advantages: 1. 基本掌握投稿类文章的写作思路； 2.开始有意识地去使用一些多样化的句式和表达，例如adopt ... methods, account for等。 Disadvantages: 1.低级失误仍然特别多,句子不会写(句子成分缺失、从句不会用)； 2.审题不清，要点遗漏或者所给信息利用不全； 3.重复现象严重，废话太多； 4.句意表达不清楚，不知所云 5.评论或建议不能够回扣主题，或者随意改动为其他话题。 0.5倍速还原应用文的写作过程 低级失误： (1) listen English musics / watch English movie (2) There are about 18 percent students read book (3) according to result of investigate / These my advice (4) as we known/ we should also reading / which contribute to learn English (5) The percent of people learns English with listening to music is accounted for 50%. (6) About 50 percents of students chose to watching movies in English to improve themselves skills. (7) It is clear that listening to music and watching movie, which is really good. (8) The consequence that In my mind is satisfied. The important way I think is listening to songs, because which can improve our oral English. (9) Many students who like listening to English songs. 50% of them like watching English movies. 如何审题？ 通过仔细审题，你能得出的信息： 1.体裁：投稿类文章，直接切入主题展开内容即可。 2.段落分布：三段式较为合理 第一段：总体概述+背景简单介绍 第二段：学习活动状况描述+简单评论 第三段：你的建议 Para1: 整体概述+背景简单介绍 Learning English Beyond the Classroom There are many ways we can do to learn English well. ? 如何思考： 文体是投稿，给大家读的 大家对这个图表的背景不了解 简单介绍图表的来源，然后再引出对学习状况的评述。 Para2: 学习活动状况描述+简单评论 1.什么叫学习活动状况描述？ 简单评论？ 描述是具体阐述，向大家说清楚 利用好表格里边的信息和数据，进行具体阐释 Problem: 许多同学无视题目中提供的数据，简单描述，甚至一笔带过。 常规理解：评论就是说明自己对之前所描述现象的观点或者看法，并适当总结。 Para3:你的建议 你对什么的建议？ 对课外英语学习方式的建议 Problems: 没有回归主题，建议没有落实到课外英语的学习方式去，而是跳到了其他方面，例如communication skills, the ablilty of translation或者学习英语的重要性上。 1.建议大家选择其中某种方式，而不选择另外的方式，因为这种方式是...； 2.课外英语学习方式上该注意和坚持的问题：只要是合适的，哪种都可以；方式可以多样，但无论用什么方式, ...才是最重要的。 如何表达？--Para1 汉语→英语 最近我们学校做了一次有关于课外学习方式的调研。结果如下。 recently, 时间状语，现在完成时 做...调研: do a survey/ conduct a resarch 有关于课外学习方式: on/about learning beyond classroom. 主语 our school as follows Para2 怎样用多样化的句式表达这个调研结果？ 1. 65% of the students learn English by ... while 50% of the students do this by... . 2. Many students prefer to learn English by doing, the percentage of which is ... %. 3. The students who learn English by ... account for ... 4. 65% of the students choose to ... by ... 简单评论→适当总结，表达看法 The result shows that ... / The graph indicates that ... 根据个人的情况，给出具体的建议。 Para 3 就我而言/对于我自己来说 As far as I am concerned Personally speaking In my opinion From where I stand From my point of view 提建议的句式：why not do sth/It’s a good idea to do/ I suggest that/ It would be better if we do sth... 具体的建议是什么？ 1.无论用什么方式，适合自己的就是最好的。 2. 我们应该多看书阅读，少听音乐看电影。 3. 用什么方式不重要，坚持和毅力才是最重要的。 1. No matter what way we choose, make sure that it is suitable for you. 2. We should ... instead of doing/ rather than do. 3. It is ... that make all the difference. Learning English Beyond the Classroom There are many things we can do to learn English well.Recently, we conducted a survey concerning different ways to learn English beyond the classroom. The results are as follows. There are roughly 65% of the students preferring to listen to English songs while 50% of the students choose to watch English movies. But the percentage of students reading English books is only 18%, followed by 12% who study English via English learning websites. The results suggest that most students would rather study English in a more entertaining way. From my point of view, we should also take English books and websites into consideration, thus laying a solid foundation for English. 其他需要注意的问题 1. 在规定的格子之内把需要的内容写完，所写内容不能超出所给的格子，否则会扣分。(不是越多越好！) 2.要点一定不能遗漏，否则扣分很严重！ 3. 卷面的勾画一定要严格控制！ Activity3: Internalization and consolidation 1. 在典题本或者积累本上抄写范文； 2. 背诵范文 Summary 1.审题很重要！花点时间好好审题一点也不浪费时间！ (体裁、格式、安排每段该写什么、思考句式和具体内容！) 2. 写句子一定要有主谓，写从句一定得有引导词！ 3.写评述的内容一定要回扣主题，不要随意扩大或缩小！ 4.下笔之前想清楚再写，不确定的用法不用！ 5.书写和卷面！ 6. 要给作文留出足够的时间！ $$