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读后续写continuation writing 要求 requirements: 提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给两段段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节合理、完整的短文。 评分标准 scoring criteria： 第五档 21—25分 ·能涵盖所有要点，创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高； ·使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解； ·自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。 三方面：内容+ 语言+ 结构 解题方法 methods： Time: about 35mins Procedure: reading + thinking +writing ·read the passage for 5W1H; the theme; the plot line; the emotional line ·think about the outline : ④②①③ ·write the two paragraphs by adding details: 语言、动作、情感、环境、心理... 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 1 读后续写continuation writing 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 2 1I had stopped at the Swindon （史云顿 英国城市名）services (服务区) while on my way back to London. As I drove up the slip road, I spotted a man with a backpack and his thumb (拇指) out. I pulled over and lowered the window. 2“Which way are you heading?” I asked, “I’m going back to London.” 3“Ah, that would be grand,” came his immediate reply. He opened the door and lifted his backpack on to the back seat. “I’m Brendan,” he said with an easy smile and a rich Irish (爱尔兰) tongue. “I was getting a bit desperate. I’ve had my thumb out for a day and half. Nobody seems to stop these days.” 4“I haven’t eaten in days,” said Brendan. “I’m trying to get home.” 5I’ve always enjoyed picking up hitchhikers. I used to be a motoring journalist and crossed the country in various test cars. Picking up a hiker always made me feel a little less guilty about all the miles I was doing. 6As we headed east along the motorway, Brendan told me how he came to be waiting for a lift on that particular evening, and also about the two recent family tragedies (悲剧) that had ruined him and pushed him out of his old life and on to the road. 7Brendan told me that he was 52. He laughed a lot and enjoyed his off-grid (不入网的) lifestyle. Until last week, that is, when he’d been mugged (抢劫). 8“Three young men in Birmingham took my other pack and it had all my money in it. I’ve been sleeping out since then. I haven’t eaten in days. I’m hoping to get some casual work in London, so I can then get myself home to Ireland.” 9It must have been the concept of home that got me, and helping a man who’d clearly had a tough time seemed like the right thing to do. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off (希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea.①承接前句 ____________________________________________________________________②根据续写第二段首句 Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug.③承接前句 ____________________________________________________________________④结尾/主题/升华 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 3 1I had stopped at the Swindon （史云顿 英国城市名）services (服务区) while on my way back to London. As I drove up the slip road, I spotted a man with a backpack and his thumb (拇指) out. I pulled over and lowered the window. 2“Which way are you heading?” I asked, “I’m going back to London.” 3“Ah, that would be grand,” came his immediate reply. He opened the door and lifted his backpack on to the back seat. “I’m Brendan,” he said with an easy smile and a rich Irish (爱尔兰) tongue. “I was getting a bit desperate. I’ve had my thumb out for a day and half. Nobody seems to stop these days.” 4“I haven’t eaten in days,” said Brendan. “I’m trying to get home.” 5I’ve always enjoyed picking up hitchhikers. I used to be a motoring journalist and crossed the country in various test cars. Picking up a hiker always made me feel a little less guilty about all the miles I was doing. 6As we headed east along the motorway, Brendan told me how he came to be waiting for a lift on that particular evening, and also about the two recent family tragedies (悲剧) that had ruined him and pushed him out of his old life and on to the road. 7Brendan told me that he was 52. He laughed a lot and enjoyed his off-grid (不入网的) lifestyle. Until last week, that is, when he’d been mugged (抢劫). 8“Three young men in Birmingham took my other pack and it had all my money in it. I’ve been sleeping out since then. I haven’t eaten in days. I’m hoping to get some casual work in London, so I can then get myself home to Ireland.” 9It must have been the concept of home that got me, and helping a man who’d clearly had a tough time seemed like the right thing to do. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off (希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea. ____________________________________________________________________ Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. ____________________________________________________________________ 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 4 1I had stopped at the Swindon （史云顿 英国城市名）services (服务区) while on my way back to London. As I drove up the slip road, I spotted a man with a backpack and his thumb (拇指) out. I pulled over and lowered the window. 2“Which way are you heading?” I asked, “I’m going back to London.” 3“Ah, that would be grand,” came his immediate reply. He opened the door and lifted his backpack on to the back seat. “I’m Brendan,” he said with an easy smile and a rich Irish (爱尔兰) tongue. “I was getting a bit desperate. I’ve had my thumb out for a day and half. Nobody seems to stop these days.” 4“I haven’t eaten in days,” said Brendan. “I’m trying to get home.” 5I’ve always enjoyed picking up hitchhikers. I used to be a motoring journalist and crossed the country in various test cars. Picking up a hiker always made me feel a little less guilty about all the miles I was doing. 6As we headed east along the motorway, Brendan told me how he came to be waiting for a lift on that particular evening, and also about the two recent family tragedies (悲剧) that had ruined him and pushed him out of his old life and on to the road. 7Brendan told me that he was 52. He laughed a lot and enjoyed his off-grid (不入网的) lifestyle. Until last week, that is, when he’d been mugged (抢劫). 8“Three young men in Birmingham took my other pack and it had all my money in it. I’ve been sleeping out since then. I haven’t eaten in days. I’m hoping to get some casual work in London, so I can then get myself home to Ireland.” 9It must have been the concept of home that got me, and helping a man who’d clearly had a tough time seemed like the right thing to do. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off (希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea. ____________________________________________________________________ Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. ____________________________________________________________________ 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 5 Task 1 Analyze the story：5W1H who Brendan and I. when where what why how He came to be waiting for a lift on that particular evening and Have had my thumb out for a day and half. at noon Swindon services-- on the way to Heathrow airport- at Heathrow airport I gave Brendan a lift to London and he shared his suffering Brendan had been mugged and he had no money to get himself home to Ireland. ? 601c1aa4-fd92-4c32-8a81-0a8a5049f6bb.source.3.zh-Hans 6 Background Rising action Climax Falling action Resolution When I spotted a man on my way back to London, I offered to give him a ride. As we head along the motorway, Brendan shared his story. Brendan told me he was mugged and decided to go home. The concept of home got me and I was determined to help him out. ??? Task 2 Analyze the story：plot line 7 Task 3 Analyze the story：Emotional line Emotional line 1.Nobody gave him a lift these days 2.He had been mugged and no money to go home desperate I gave him a lift. easy and happy I drive to the Heathrow airport instead of London surprised Buy his air ticket and gave me a huge hug grateful 这里填写标题 Task 3: Analyze the theme ... helping a man who’d clearly had a tough time seemed like the right thing to do. 抓主要矛盾 这里填写标题 Task 2: Draft the key words P1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea. P2: Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. (1) List the verbs and adverbs (2) Share them within groups 1: I decided to offered him a meal and the money for an air ticket. 2: He was astonished at my kindness and generosity. How did he express his feelings? （actions, expressions and emotions） What lesson did I learn from the experience? (THEME) I: Brendan: Brendan: I: pulled over the car handed him some money kindly ordered some food stopped at a cafe devoured the meal in minutes replied gratefully took over the note with gratitude thanked me repeatedly his face lit up with gratitude headed towards/for the airport chatted happily laughed heartily tightly embraced me waved goodbye with warmth and sincerity exchanged contact information disappeared in the distance ... 这里填写标题 Task 4 Analyze the story：the theme ... helping a man who’d clearly had a tough time seemed like the right thing to do. Give someone a hand when they need it (be a rainbow in somebody else’s cloud) P1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea. P2: Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. Task 1: Analyse the given sentences What can you infer from the two sentences? setting character Q1What was the idea? The main focus of the conlict: Expectation: GO HOME Reality: no money; no food treat him to a meal give him some money to buy the ticket home Q2What was his reaction? surprised thankful 12 Task 4: Analyze the main conflict ... helping a man who’d clearly had a tough time seemed like the right thing to do. “I’ve had my thumb out for a day and half. Nobody seems to stop these days.” “I haven’t eaten in days,” two recent family tragedies ruined him and pushed him out of his old life and on to the road he was mugged last week and the men took his pack and all his money. “I’m hoping to get some casual work in London, so I can then get myself home to Ireland.” The main focus of the conlict: Expectation: GO HOME Reality: no money; no food 这里填写标题 Plot the story 14 作业反馈： 态度端正，精神可嘉,可喜可贺 内容：不帮忙找工作当网红，街头卖艺 不加人物：policeman、抢劫犯（被抓到），他的家人 不延长时间线：几周后，几个月后，一年后，几年后 不延长故事线：与家人和解，再次相见（伦敦/爱尔兰），报纸报道（把爱传递下去），变得富有并报恩，(原文中他计划去伦敦，工作、赚钱、回家) 字数：两段字数均匀 语言：文体：记叙文，不是说明文议论文 时态：一般过去时态 标点符号：He said, “Thank you.” “Thank you.” he said. 结构：不再分三四五段 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 15 Period 2 一.习作中存在的问题 结合新高考全国I卷读后续写的各档次给分范围和要求，及其评分原则，我们可以看出：定档的下调体现的是我们的续写故事在内容与融洽度、词汇与语法、衔接与连贯性等方面写作能力的递减。而我们的读后续写习作中除了常见的单词拼写错误和各种句子语法错误外，融洽度低、上下文的衔接性和连贯性差则是更突出的问题。 二. 倒置索读法/④②①③ As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off (希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea.①承接前句 ____________________________________________________________________②根据续写第二段首句 Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug.③承接前句 ____________________________________________________________________④结尾/主题/升华 三. 读后续写框架：Tea Meat框架 即：Transitional sentence衔接句→Emotion or Environment心理描写/环境描写→Action动作一→Monologue or Conversation独白/对话→Emotion or Environment心理描写/环境描写→Action动作二→Transitional sentence衔接句或者Theme主题句。 框架中的具体描写可根据故事情节需要适当调整顺序。 P1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea. 1: I decided to offered him a meal and the money for an air ticket. 2: He was astonished at my kindness and generosity. P2: Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. How did he express his feelings? （actions, expressions and emotions） What lesson did I learn from the experience? (THEME) 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 16 P1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea. P2: Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. Task 1: Analyse the given sentences What can you infer from the two sentences? 1: I decided to offered him a meal and the money for an air ticket. 2: He was astonished at my kindness and generosity. How did he express his feelings? （actions, expressions and emotions） What lesson did I learn from the experience? (THEME) 17 P1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea. I decided to offered him a meal and the money for an air ticket. He was astonished at my kindness and generosity. 想法：1.给他钱买票和食物————出于什么原因，决定帮助他？——达到什么样的目的？(原因状语+结果状语）（心理描写） 具体怎么做？ 1.转弯---开往机场—停车—（动作链） 2.给钱（掏钱——递给他，附带说什么？（语言） 3.他什么反应？———.他说什么？神态，表情如何？动作？（语言+神态描写） 逻辑：思维决定行动。 我的想法是？为什么？做法是什么？具体拆解步骤？我说什么？动作？心理？神态？表情？甚至环境？ 他的反应？他语言？神态？心理？表情？动作？ 语言打磨——决定送他去机场（机票钱） 某人突然想到 an idea strikes sb that/occurs to sb that Driven by a sense of duty and inspired by experience that I got help from others when I was a motoring journalist, an idea suddenly occurred to me that I could directly drove to the airport and offer the fee. Without any hesitation, I took a turn and headed for the airport. 1 Polished version: 充实内容+丰富句式 _ I offered to take him to the airport and gave him some money ________________________________________. ____________________________________________ I took a sharp turn and headed for the terminal . Driven by a sense of duty and goodwill so that he could go back home as early as possible At the thought of this 过 渡, Driven by a sense of duty and inspired by experience that I got help from others when I was a motoring journalist, I made a decision that I should give him a hand. Without thinking twice/any hesitation, I took a turn and headed for the airport. 这里填写标题 2. 语言打磨——给钱/钱不够？-取钱 When we arrived at the airport, I gave him some money. Polished version: 动作链，发挥想象，巧用三联动，充实场景 _____________ my wallet, I ________ him the money he needed, ________________ he should use them to buy a warm meal and an air ticket back to Ireland. Reaching into handed insisting that When we arrived at the airport, I pulled over, reached into my wallet, and handed him the money he need, insisting that he should use them to buy a warm meal and an air ticket back to Ireland. 这里填写标题 2-取钱 到达机场之后，我买了一些食物，从自动取款机取了300英镑，递给了他。 1.When arriving there, I bought some food from a shop and withdrew 300 pounds from an ATM machine, all of which were handed to Brendan. 2.Arriving there, I bought some food from a shop and withdrew 300 pounds from an ATM machine, all of which were handed to Brendan. 3.语言打磨——感动 Surprised and excited, Brendan looked at me with his eyes filled with appreciation. 关于感动的表达方式 - - A wave of warmth surged over sb. - He glanced at sb, weeping（哭泣） with tears of gratitude. - Grasping one’s hand firmly, I shed（流下） tears of gratitude, unable to utter（说出） a single word. 这里填写标题 一 我与他 有来有往 As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off (希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea. Driven by a sense of duty and inspired by experience that I got help from others when I was a motoring journalist, I made a decision that I should give him a hand. Without thinking twice, I took a turn and headed for the airport. （心理描写） （动作描写） When we arrived at the airport, I pulled over the car, reached my wallet and handed him the money he needed,（动作描写） insisting that he should use them to buy a warm meal and an air ticket back to Ireland. Surprised and excited, Brendan looked at me with his eyes filled with appreciation. He said,“thank you very much”， holding my hands firmly.(他的语言+神态描写） 二 先把想法直接说出来产生对话—行动（开往机场—给钱） “Why don’t I just drop you at the airport （把你送到机场）now?” I said. “I’ll give you money to buy a ticket and you can fly home.” Hearing what I said, Brendan was shocked. “Really?” he seemed stunned. “That’s so kind of you,” he added, with his eyes full of gratitude. (语言描写+神态描写）on the way to the airport, I told Brendan my experiences as a motoring journalist and the help I had received, making him have a better understanding of my decision.（原因） I took a turn and headed for the airport. When we arrived at the airport, I pulled over the car, reached my wallet and handed him the money he needed. （动作描写）He said , “thank you,” holding my hands firmly .（语言描写） Arriving there, I bought some food from a shop and withdrew 300 pounds from an ATM machine, all of which were handed to Brendan. P2 Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug.他与我 ，有来有往 他说什么话？做什么事？神态？表情？心理？环境？ 1.感谢（如果没有你，我就不能那么快到家）（语言描写+神态描写）（虚拟语气） 2.留联系方式（具体——从包里拿出纸笔）答应一到家就联系并我归还钱（动作链） 3.离别 4.我的反应 之后做什么事？作者回到故事轨迹——到开篇 4-1目送他离开——驱车开往伦敦，——路上又心情如何？有什么思考？ 5.点题——帮助别人 如果没有你，我就不能那么快到家 “Without your help, I wouldn’t be able to make it home so quickly,” Brendan chocked with between sobs(哽咽.)（语言描写） 他从他的背包里掏出纸笔，记下了我的电话号码，告诉我他一回家就会联系我并归还费用。 He took out a pen and a piece of paper from his backpack, wrote down my telephone number, and said he would give me a call as well as return the money the moment he got home. 我们挥手告别 We waved goodbye to each other. 我看到他消失在远处。 I saw him disappeared in the distance. 我开车前往伦敦的家 I drove to my own house in London. 当我想到他时，一股强烈的喜悦抓住了我。 a strong sense of delight took hold of me when thinking of Brendan . 描写快乐的情绪：A strong sense of delight took hold of me the moment I thought of Brendan . /I was as happy as a pig in mud./Happiness washed over me like a beam of sunlight./ 点题 1.Nothing is better than being a rainbow in somebody else’s cloud. 2.Even the smallest act of caring for another person is like a drop of water -it will make ripples（波纹） throughout the entire pond. 3.Never underestimate the difference you can make in the lives of others. Step forward, reach out. 4."Gifts of roses, hand there are lingering fragrance." Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug.他与我 ，有来有往 “Without your help, I wouldn’t be able to make it home so quickly,” he chocked with between sobs(哽咽.)（语言描写）Then he took out a pen and a piece of paper from his backpack, wrote down my telephone number, and said he would give me a call as well as return the money when he got home. （动作描写）We waved goodbye to each other. （我的活动）After seeing him disappeared in the distance, I drove to my own house in London. The gentle wind stroked（轻抚，stroke) my hair, as if telling me that I had done a truly worthy deed.（环境描写） A strong sense of delight took hold of me the moment I thought of Brendan . /Happiness washed over me like a beam of sunlight.(像暖阳洒在他身上）Nothing is better than being a rainbow in someone’s cloud . （点题） 一As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off (希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea. Driven by a sense of duty and inspired by experience that I got help from others when I was a motoring journalist, I made a decision that I should give him a hand. Without any hesitation, I took a turn and headed for the airport. （心理描写） When we arrived at the airport, I pulled over the car, reached my wallet and handed him the money he needed,（动作描写） insisting that he should use them to buy a warm meal and an air ticket back to Ireland. Brendan looked at me with his eyes filled with appreciation. He said “thank you very much.” holding my hands firmly.(语言+神态描写） Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. “Without your help, I wouldn’t be able to make it home so quickly,” he chocked with between sobs(哽咽.)（语言描写） Then he took out a pen and a piece of paper from his backpack, wrote down my telephone number, and said he would give me a call as well as return the money when he got home. （动作描写）We waved goodbye to each other. （我的活动）After seeing him disappeared in the distance, I drove to my own house in London. The gentle wind stroked（轻抚，stroke) my hair, as if telling me that I had done a truly worthy deed. (环境描写） I was as happy as as a pig in mud. Being a rainbow in someone’s cloud is a good thing.（点题） （2）“Why don’t I just drop you at the airport （把你送到机场）now?” I said. “I’ll give you money to buy a ticket and you can fly home.” Hearing what I said, Brendan was shocked. “Really?” he seemed stunned. “That’s so kind of you,” he added, with his eyes full of gratitude. (语言描写+神态描写）. on the way to the airport, I told Brendan my experiences as a motoring journalist and the help I had received, making him have a better understanding of my decision.（原因） I took a turn and headed for the airport. When we arrived at the airport, I pulled over the car, reached my wallet and handed him the money he needed. （动作描写）He said , “thank you,” holding my hands firmly.（语言描写） Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug.“Without your help, I wouldn’t be able to make it home so quickly,” he chocked with between sobs(哽咽.)（语言描写）Then he took out a pen and a piece of paper from his backpack, wrote down my telephone number, and said he would give me a call as well as return the money when he got home. （动作描写）We waved goodbye to each other. （我）After seeing him disappeared in the distance, I drove to my own house in London. The gentle wind stroked（轻抚，stroke) my hair, as if telling me that I had done a truly worthy deed. （环境）A strong sense of delight took hold of me the moment I thought of Brendan. （点题）Nothing is better than being a rainbow in someone’s cloud. 三 As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off (希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea. "Why not take a flight getting yourself back to Ireland since the Heathrow Airport is nearby? I'd like to offer you the fee." I asked. With his eyes and mouth widely open, Brendan replied," Really? It is so kind of you. I don't know how to express my gratitude." I smiled back, turned the wheel and speeded up towards the airport. Meanwhile, I told Brendan my experiences as a motoring journalist and the help I had received, making him have a better understanding of my decision. Arriving there, I bought some food from a shop and withdrew 300 pounds from an ATM machine, all of which were handed to Brendan. Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug. With grateful tears in his eyes, he kept extending his gratitude（表达感谢）, saying “Thank you so much. Without your help, I wouldn’t go home so quickly.” I gently patted him on the shoulder, telling him not to worry about it. He insisted on asking me for my phone number to return the money on his arrival home, so we exchanged our contact information. Finally, it’s time for him to set off. We waved to say goodbye to each other until he walked into the departure lounge（候机厅）. Bathed in sunshine, I started the car, in an eagerness to go home in London. I murmured（低语） that nothing is better than to be a rainbow in somebody else’s cloud. 1e74828b-a0d9-4903-aec4-1626d3507ff6.source.default.zh-Hans 31 $$