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第2课时——强化表达功·写作短板的专项补弱
as long as引导条件状语从句
(1)as long as意为“只要”,引导条件状语从句,条件状语从句中常用一般现在时代替一般将来时。
(2)引导条件状语从句的连词(词组)还有if, unless, only if, in case, provided/providing (that), on condition (that), suppose/supposing(that), given (that)等。
(3)as long as和so long as表示“只要”时,可以互换;as long as表示“与……一样长”时,多用于肯定句;否定句常用so long as。
|先|学|通|(通过句子变换把握句式特点)
①You can borrow the book if you keep it clean.
→You can borrow the book as/so_long_as_you_keep_it_clean.
②If they refuse us, who else can we turn to for help?
→Suppose/Supposing/Providing/Provided/Given_that_they_refuse_us,_who else can we turn to for help?
|再|写|美|(通过句子仿写做到运用自如)
③只要我对自己有信心,我相信我会有一个美好的未来。
As/So_long_as_I_have_confidence_in_myself,_I believe I will have a wonderful future.
④在我们的生活中,我们可能会遇到很多失败。然而,只要我们尽自己最大的努力,就没有必要为这些失败而感到遗憾。
In our life we may meet many failures. However, as/so_long_as_we_try_our_best,_there's no need to feel regret for these failures.
赏结构与修辞之美
Esmeralda and Quasimodo were still for several moments, as they considered their predicament in silence, she so graceful, he so repulsive.Every moment Esmeralda discovered some fresh defect in Quasimodo, as her glance travelled from his knock knees to his hunched back, from his hunched back to his single eye. How anyone could be formed in such a way was beyond her comprehension.Yet there was so much melancholy and so much gentleness spread over all this that she gradually adjusted to it.
写法领悟:作者在第一句中使用了独立主格结构she so graceful, he so repulsive作状语,形象地对他们二人的外表作了对比——一个优美,一个难看,对小说中体现的人物外表与内心的冲突起到了明显的反衬作用。第二句和第四句中都使用了排比结构,描写细腻,形象生动。
[针对练笔] (依据提示完成句子/翻译句子)
①He sat in the front row, his_mouth_half_open.
他坐在前排,嘴半张开着。
②We're still alive; we're still young; we're still holding on!
我们仍然活着;我们仍然年轻;我们仍然坚持着!
[命题导向]
本单元围绕“自我认知”这一主题展开,属于人与自我的主题语境。高考在设题时通常以投稿、邮件、议论文等载体考查如何看待美与丑,如何理解外表美与心灵美,如何面对周围人的目光和评价,如何保持清醒的头脑接受独一无二的自己等内容,旨在引发学生对外表与内心关系的思考,对外表的重要性形成正确的认识,帮助学生学会认识自我,树立正确的审美观和人生态度。
构建语义场
(一)外在美
1.external beauty 外在美
2.a handsome and well-presented young man一个英俊又体面的年轻人
3.attractive appearance 吸引人的外表
4.present a fashionable image 展现一个时髦的形象
5.from head to toe 从头到脚
6.make a good and positive impression on others给他人留下良好、积极的印象
7.First of all, be careful not to follow popular beauty standards blindly.
首先要审慎,不要盲从流行的审美标准。
(二)内在美
1.inner beauty 内在美
2.boost one's confidence 增加某人的信心
3.obtain the praise of others 获得别人的赞扬
4.improve our confidence and self-esteem提高我们的自信和自尊
5.have a positive outlook on life 对生活有积极的态度
6.“Don't judge a book by its cover,” the old saying goes.古话说得好:“不要以貌取人。”
7.Only by pursuing feeling good rather than looking good can a teenager grasp the true meaning of beauty.青少年只有通过追求感觉好而不是外表好,才能领会美的真谛。
平时勤练笔
写作任务——基础写作的建模训练
[题目] 你校英文网站“生活”专栏正在举行征文活动,主题是“Looking good,feeling good”。请你写一篇短文投稿,内容包括:
1.外表与内在健康哪个更重要;
2.青少年正确的审美观。
注意:1.写作词数应为80左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Looking good, feeling good
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[构思与要点表达]
第一部分:表明观点——内在健康更重要
[头脑风暴] 引出内在健康更重要的常用词块有哪些?
1.当谈到时 when_it_comes_to
2.外表好 look_good
3.感觉好 feel_good
4.比……更重要 more_important_than
[连词成句] When_it_comes_to_the_question_which_is_more_important,_ looking_good_or_feeling_good,_my_answer_is_that_feeling_good_is_more_important_than_looking_good.
当谈到外表好和感觉好哪个更重要的问题时,我的回答是感觉好比外表好更重要。
第二部分:阐述内在健康重要的原因
要点1 内在健康的含义
[从教材中学]
I completely agree with Emma — being healthy is beautiful, and we should wear that beauty with confidence.
[到写作中用] 感觉良好意味着拥有良好的身心健康、快乐和积极的人生观。
Feeling_good_means_having_good_physical_and_mental_health,_being_happy,_and_having_a_positive_outlook_on_life.
要点2 提高自信和自尊
[从教材中学]
What I really admire is the way she has acknowledged that good health not only makes us more beautiful, but happier, too!
[到写作中用]
对于青少年来说,一方面,感觉好不仅可以提高我们的自信和自尊,而且可以向周围的人散发快乐。
For teenagers, for one thing,feeling good can not_only_improve_our_confidence_and_self-esteem,_but_also_radiate_happiness_to_those_around_us.
要点3 美的源泉
[从教材中学]
It's true that inner beauty is very important,but external beauty shouldn't be completely overlooked.
[到写作中用]
很明显,抱负和信念的结合是美的另一个源泉。
It_is_obvious_that the combination of ambition and faith serves as another source of beauty.
第三部分:青少年正确的审美观
[从教材中学]
His body is discovered, old and awful, while his portrait is young and handsome once again.
[到写作中用] 总之,虽然外表好看很重要,但感觉良好应该始终是我们的首选。
In conclusion, while_looking_good_matters,_feeling_good_should_always_be_our_top_choice.
[衔接与逻辑成篇]
运用补加、过渡与衔接,将上述语句连接成篇
Looking good, feeling good
When it comes to the question which is more important, looking good or feeling good, my answer is that feeling good is more important than looking good.
Feeling good means having good physical and mental health, being happy, and having a positive outlook on life. For teenagers, for one thing, feeling good can not only improve our confidence and self-esteem, but also radiate happiness to those around us.For another thing, it is obvious that the combination of ambition and faith serves as another source of beauty.
In conclusion, while looking good matters, feeling good should always be our top choice.
Ⅰ.根据要求完成下列句子
1.(完成句子)Never_have_I_heard (我从来没听过) anything like it!
2.(完成句子)When_to_decorate_the_house (什么时候装修房子) hasn't been decided.
3.(完成句子)You will find it easy to learn Tang poems as_long_as_you_understand _the_history_of_the_Tang_Dynasty (只要你了解唐朝历史) briefly ahead of time.
4.(完成句子)Mary could do nothing but rely on other people (只能依靠别人) to solve the problem.
5.(完成句子)The children were_covered_in_mud_from_head_to_toe (浑身上下都是泥).
6.(完成句子)Therefore,the film industry should make_greater_efforts_to _attract_more_audiences (做出更大的努力来吸引更多观众).
7.(一句多译)现在,许多青少年发现与他人交朋友很困难。
①Nowadays, many teenagers find to have_much_difficulty/trouble_(in)_making_friends with others.(difficulty/trouble)
②Nowadays, many teenagers find to have_much_bother_(in)_making_friends with others.(bother)
8.As time went by,he contented himself with a simple life.
→With_time_going_by,_he contented himself with a simple life.(用with复合结构改写)
9.He is universally acknowledged as the best writer in China.
→It's_universally_acknowledged_that he is the best writer in China.(it作形式主语)
10.He would ask who we were and pretend not to know us.
→He would ask who we were, pretending_not_to_know_us.(用现在分词短语作状语改写)
Ⅱ.语法填空
(2024·保定高三联考)So, you are interested in becoming a good journalist but don't know where to start? Well, there are a couple of things you should put on your list of priorities. To begin with, you need to be skilled at writing. The information __1__ (involve) in a complex story may come from dozens of __2__ (source). Good journalists need to organize all his information clearly to give an accurate account of __3__ is happening.
In addition, you must have a natural curiosity about things __4__ are happening, even though they may appear to be minor matters. When something newsworthy comes __5__, it may escape the attention of ordinary people. However, good journalists are sensitive enough to notice __6__ event and draw public attention to it.
Finally, good journalists commit __7__ (they) to revealing the truth. According to Noam Chomsky, “The duty of journalists is __8__ (tell) the truth. Journalism means you go back to the actual fact, you look at the documents, you discover what the record is, and you report it that way.” To do this, journalists need to investigate an event __9__ (complete).
To sum up, being good journalists __10__ (require) writing skills, curiosity and commitment to finding the truth. Good luck!
语篇解读:本文是一篇说明文。文章介绍了成为一名优秀的记者所需要具备的一些条件。
1.involved 考查非谓语动词。本句已有谓语动词may come,所以空处应用非谓语动词,且动词involve与主语The information之间为被动关系,故填involved。get/be involved in意为“卷入;涉及”。
2.sources 考查名词复数。 dozens of意为“很多”,后面跟名词复数。
3.what 考查连接词。of后面接宾语从句,从句部分缺少主语,结合句意可知,此处指事情而不是人,故填what。
4.that/which 考查定语从句。 things是先行词,指物,从句部分缺少主语,故可以用that或which引导定语从句。
5.about 考查介词。 come about为固定搭配,意为“出现,发生”。
6.the 考查冠词。这里的event指的是上文的something newsworthy,表特指,故用定冠词the。
7.themselves 考查代词。commit oneself to doing sth.意为“致力于做某事”,且句子的主语是复数,故填themselves。
8.to tell/telling 考查非谓语动词。is后面跟表语,可以用to do不定式或v.-ing形式,故填to tell/telling。
9.completely 考查副词。此处修饰动词investigate,应用副词,表示“彻底地调查”。
10.requires 考查动词的时态和主谓一致。句子主语是being good journalists,谓语动词应用第三人称单数形式,且句子描述客观事实,应用一般现在时。故填requires。
Ⅲ.应用文写作
假定你是李华,你的笔友Jennifer 为了减肥,经常不吃早饭。对此你很担心,请你给她写一封信,内容包括:
1.说明不吃早饭的危害; 2.你的建议。
注意:1.写作词数应为80左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
参考范文:
Dear Jennifer,
I'm so worried to know that you have not eaten breakfast for the last few months to keep slim, which is unhealthy.
As we know, it is important to have a healthy balanced diet since teenagers are still growing and our bodies need a lot of nutrition to function well. What's worse, if we do not take in enough food, we may feel weak and get ill easily.
It is normal for teenagers to be slightly overweight and there is no reason why you should be worried. I strongly encourage you to keep regular hours and get plenty of exercise because living well is the safest and most effective way to get into shape.
Yours,
Li Hua
学科网(北京)股份有限公司
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