读后续写 小男孩的警车 课件-2024届高三英语二轮复习

小男孩的警车 读后续写 线索： 1. When we are little kids, birthday parties are momentous occasions. They are our time to shine. 2. Allen Miller thought the police were awesome, hoping to become one of them! 3. And all he wanted for his birthday party was a model police car. 4. His duty is to serve and protect, and he decided to protect Allen from having a bad day, and serve him the most amazing seventh birthday party! 主题： 从线索可以看出文章是：目标（goal）——达成 （realize），也就是说作为一个完整的故事，最后应该有 三点：Allan拿到了 a model police car，并且感觉 become one of them，同时这一刻是his time to shine。 学生错误： 1. 细节与主旨无关或不合情理，如： Allen坐上警车的忐忑、 Allen的震惊、警官蒙上Allen眼睛、“生日快乐，许个愿吧”； “这是给我的吗？”台词、对拆盒子之前的动作和心理描写过多 合理的情节是为角色和主题服务，比如：警察们宣布小男孩是他们的一员了，或者带他在小区转一下，执勤，这样的细节描写更合理。 反思：动笔之前要先构思好提纲，并有所取舍。不能一味堆砌辞藻，而应突出主题。 2. 重要道具即Allen的心愿model police car没有读出来 3. 句子之间缺少时间衔接和动作衔接。 分句写作练习： There, a party was waiting for him. l 他们走进房间的那一刻，整个房间回荡着“生日快乐”的合唱声，伴随着掌声和欢呼声。 笔记：the moment...时间衔接；a chorus无灵主语；accompanied by...过去分词做伴随状语 The moment they stepped inside, a chorus of “Happy birthday” echoed in the room, accompanied by claps and cheers. l 艾伦惊喜地转向他的妈妈和史密斯警官，只见他们微笑着看着他。突然间，一切都豁然开朗。这场特别的生日庆祝是为他准备的！ 笔记： only to see...不定式做结果状语，表示意