内容正文:
读后续写
评分原则
1.本题总分为25分,按七个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,主要从内容、语言表达和篇章结构三个方面考查,具体为:
(1)续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
(2)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受;
(3)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分。
原文材料350 词以内,要求续写的文章150词左右
续写两个自然段,每段开头语已经给出;
所给原文阅读材料以富有情节的记叙文为主,话题贴近生活,内容为问题解决,逻辑性比较强。
读后续写的3个特点:
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续写原则:
1. 不随意增加主要人物
2. 不添加与原文脱节的细节
3. 避免频繁使用对话
4. 段落与两段首句保持一致性,衔接有逻辑
第一段内容与文章衔接紧密,
第一段最后一句与第二段开头呼应衔接,
第二段最后一句总结升华主题
5. 续写内容传播正能量
深度解读语篇
Read
浅层信息获取: 5W1H
深层文本解读
理清情节和情感
分析人物性格特点
明确故事主题
品味写作风格和语言
Think
结合所给两段首句
原文呼应+正能量结局
生动编写故事
动作描写
情感描写
环境描写
语言运用
推测情节发展
构思写作框架
Write
读后续写解题三步骤
Beginning
Development
Climax (the main problem or conflict)
Ending (a time to solve the problem/ how things end up)
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Story Mountain
Plot 情节
找到问题或情节发展高潮
我们六人代表学校参赛
队员接连失利
轮到我上场 我的表现
冲过终点线 获得第四名
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我们六人代表学校参赛
队员接连失利
轮到我上场
冲过终点线 获得第四名
anxious/frightened
depressed/unhappy
be inspired/positive
情节会推动情感的变化发展,情感反映情节,为下文情节埋伏笔。
Read
Plot 情节
Emotional change 情感变化
明线
暗线
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目前你的续写存在的问题:
1. 单词拼写错误
4. 与原文的照应、替代、复现等不够,显得与上文连接得不够流畅,不够连贯。
3. 要注意句与句之间连接词的正确使用,使上下文连贯,目前很少使用关联词。
2. 时态错误!!!!!!
5. 自己写的两端之间过度生硬。
6.没有将原文中的主题升华或没有点明主旨。
As a runner, I've won many medals in the past few years.However, not all competitions saw my victory. Instead, some saw my failures- especially the competition I had taken part in as a grade school kid. It was the first time that I had experienced such a big failure.
That year, our school team had been practicing each week to be ready for the competitions among grade schools in our town. We had never taken part in such a big competition, but we believed we would win. I was representing (代表) my school in the 100-metre race and I was confident because I was tall and strong, with well-formed long legs. Jimmy was going to take part in hurdles (跨栏赛). Oliver, Levi, Led and Peter would take part in relays(接力赛).We six kids made up our school athletics team.
When the big day finally came, we left in the early. morning for the stadium wh