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Writing
八年级上册 书面表达 作文 范文(四)
八年级上英语 Module 4 写作稿 (第一稿)及分析
“Planes, ships and trains”
写作任务:
出游季十一长假即将来临,你的朋友小明将从烟台来你的家乡大连休闲旅游。请你给小明写一封信,谈谈来你家乡大连的多种交通方式及各自的优缺点,并给出你的建议。词数80次左右。
内容提示:1)How do you get to Dalian from Yantai? By car,by coach or by…….
2)What’s your advice?
要求:1.中心突出,语意连贯、层次清晰,书写规范;
2.文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名;
写作思路及策略:
一稿作文:
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[审题分析]
语篇类型:应用文— 书信
主题语境:人与社会——旅游与交通
写作要点:(1)Where are you going(2)How do you get there? (3)What’s the cheapest/the fastest/the safest/the most comfortable/the most boring way?/What’s the best way to get there?
写作素材:By car/ by ship/ by coach/ by plane/by train
语篇结构:三段式 总-分-总
注意事项:对比出行方式优缺点,最后给出你认为的最佳出行方式。
[作文支撑句]:
来自课文:
1.乘火车旅行比乘大巴车更轻松,但是更贵。
2. 当你乘火车去的时候,在你旅行前很长时间买票
3.你可以乘小汽车或者乘船去,这是最舒服的方式去旅行但是也是最贵的。
4.记住在城市中心停车非常贵,所以把车停在市中心外,乘公交车或者火车旅行。
5.乘大巴车是最便宜的,但是在夏天大巴车有时非常拥挤。
6.会花费你12小时到那。然而,它不会花费和乘火车一样多。
7.乘坐飞机是最快并且是第二便宜的,但是你也许会在机场不得不等待几个小时因为坏天气。
[解决方案]:
开头段好句子: I’m glad to hear that your family are going to visit my home town---Dalian.
Lots of people like to travel by
结尾好句子:
Wish you a good journey to Dalian!
Choose your own most comfortable way and convenient way.
范文1:
Dear Xiaoming,
I’m glad to hear that your family are going to visit my home town---Dalian. Welcome! There are three ways you can choose: by train, by coach and by car.
A journey by train is the most relaxing way and it's less expensive. So it’s always the best choice for most people. But it’s difficult to bo