专题10 对话语言描写-2021年高考书面表达读后续写精讲精练课件

读后续写微技能（10）-对话语言描写 第八单元 考点一 考点二 核心素养专项提升 -2- 读后续写微技能三　对话语言描写 一、对话语言描写 1.注重对话语言描写的简洁 在对人物冲突中的具体的对话描写时,要注意简洁语言,切忌“长舌妇式”的语言重复,例如: ①“What is the matter now?What’s wrong with you? Is it OK with you? What has happened to you?” asked the wife.“Maybe I have made some mistakes.I just can’t remember why I come back, and I just think where I am supposed to be going on such a hot summer day,”replied the professor. ②“What’s wrong with you?” asked the wife.“I just can’t remember why I come back and where I am supposed to be going on such a hot summer day,”replied the professor. 考点一 第八单元 考点一 考点二 核心素养专项提升 2 -3- 分析:①句中多次重复同一意思“你怎么了”,而②句中则简化了妻子的表达,对教授的回答也进行了缩减。 考点一 第八单元 考点一 考点二 核心素养专项提升 3 -4- 2.对话语言描写要体现真实情感 在对人物进行对话描写时,真情实感是贴切人物的最好表达,尽量避免过于“高大上”或“假大空”,脱离人物的真实身份。如: ①“You have had a sound sleep!” the old lady shouted.“It’s time to open your eyes! We’re in a risky situation and we will have a big deal to make!” ②“What a rich lie!” Nancy thought after Jerry left.“Rich man always tells rich lies.He never took you to any places.And don’t let him charm you.He betrayed us, your beloved father.He cast us out.He cast us out of his big fancy house like we were nothing to him.He did it happily!” 考点一 第八单元 考点一 考点二 核心素养专项提升 4 -5- 分析:从句①中,我们不难发现作者对老妇人的真情实感的描写,体现了老妇人急迫的个性和对生活的不顺心而大发脾气的妇女形象。同时,结合三个感叹句,更好地体现了老妇人的急躁的心理。由此,读者也能够通过该对话,体会到语言的美感。 从句②中,我们可以发现Nancy的痛苦之处,深深地体会到了当时社会对底层老百姓的漠视和不公,同时我们也能够通过Nancy的话语,感受到她当时的愤怒之情,这就是对话语言的魅力所在。 考点一 第八单元 考点一 考点二 核心素养专项提升 5 -6- 3.注重对话语言描写的比重 在对人物冲突中的具体的对话描写,要注意在文中段落中的比重问题,切忌以全对话或大部分对话代替其他细节描写,例如: “In the garden?”Sam asked nervously.“I actually have given all I have to you! So, please do not hurt me or kill me, I beg you!” Jessica also told the thief, “Do you want all our belongings? They are all in our bedroom.I will lead you to get them.Of course, we are rich and we have a lot of money.All will be given to you if you do not hurt or kill us, please, please!” The thief said,“Of course.I will not kill you too! OK.You are so good.I will not kill you if I get this.Give a